wut do u think of my song? (lyrics, dance, pop)

A_Perfect_Sonnet · 12-10-2005, 01:38 AM

Those look most like Atreyu lyrics to me.

~~bungalow~~ · 12-10-2005, 09:10 AM

Yikes!

People should really stop writing music after girls brake up with them. Take a myspace junkies advice....and next time your girl brakes up with you, just kill yourself. It would spares us from these kind of **** lyrics.
Sounds like another ****ty song that would be a hit for 12 year old girls to make as their usernames at music forums........

Now
...The chorus is so cliche and cheesy, come on
"Broken lips utter words of despair"

"who do you think you are, just who do you think you are"
this made me laugh also
it needs some.....ok alot of work.
Take out the cliche chorus and verses and bridge.....and work with what youve got left

madeinNY · 12-10-2005, 03:51 PM

That 'twas the musical equivalent of...

I can't think of anything.

That was just awful. I'm sorry. It's just...so overused.

Ahh. Just thought of something.

The musical equivalent of The Apprentice, the same thing being done over and over except with different people.

ladyluckrules · 12-10-2005, 04:13 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by -xdistored_lifex-

You guys have clearly never heard anything out of the mainstream. I mean, MCR? Alexisonfire? Get some taste other than what's on your .99 MacDonalds menu. Like, seriously, try From First to Last, they echo my soul and it's burning passion of flames.

They're like sirloin.

You guys know Nothing about good lyrics.

Like seriously, I really feel sorry for you and like, send my sympathies to your friends and family, hope you get better soon.

I cringe for the non-mainstream and anyone that has bothered to glance past the pages of myspace.

Laces Out Dan! · 12-10-2005, 07:40 PM

Well to say the least i Hated it....and also why is every n00b that ever posts a song on here always writing about death and stupid **** like that....And i think the worst line in the whole song is "Cut My Life and Kill a Stranger"

Like for F*ck Sucks

riseagainstrocks · 12-10-2005, 07:58 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by -xdistored_lifex-

You guys have clearly never heard anything out of the mainstream. I mean, MCR? Alexisonfire? Get some taste other than what's on your .99 MacDonalds menu. Like, seriously, try From First to Last, they echo my soul and it's burning passion of flames.

They're like sirloin.

You guys know Nothing about good lyrics.

this has to be a joke account. no person would ever ever claim that those were good lyrics.

hell Spikey didn't like them

-xdistored_lifex- · 12-10-2005, 08:47 PM

You Guys Obviously Dont Know Nething About Music
If U Guyz Think Ur So Good Y Doesnt Someone Battle Me With Their Lyrics. We'll See Who Is The Better Songwriter.
Burning Ansgt Awaits Those Who Spitefully Contrast My Afflictions.
Just Made That Up And It Burns Nething U Could Evr Do

~~bungalow~~ · 12-10-2005, 08:48 PM

Oh.....I'll challenge you
Here it goes

~~bungalow~~ · 12-10-2005, 08:54 PM

I woke up the other day and cried
I was sad because because my girlfriend died
So I cut my wrists through the vein
My life is so hard that I cant feel pain

xxI slit my wrists for you xx
xx I sat and Cried for you xx
xxI died my hair black to be cool xx
xxI wish i could see you xx

My life is an abyss of pain
Falling through a spiral of razorblade game
Someone murder me cause I dont wanna wake up again
Bye bye my life love lost
For you I pay the bloody cost

xxI cut my wrists for you xx
xx I took my life for you xx
xx My broken tears are silent on your back xx
I would fuck you If i was a necropheliac

BEAT THAT BITCH

sleepy jack · 12-10-2005, 08:55 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by -xdistored_lifex-

You Guys Obviously Dont Know Nething About Music
If U Guyz Think Ur So Good Y Doesnt Someone Battle Me With Their Lyrics. We'll See Who Is The Better Songwriter.
Burning Ansgt Awaits Those Who Spitefully Contrast My Afflictions.
Just Made That Up And It Burns Nething U Could Evr Do

I just cant stand it anymore,
My life is spiraling downwards,
You bled my dry when you broke my heart,
For all the blood fell out of it,
Now as crimson water falls from my wrists
I think of you
Now as im in such pain,
I think of you,
Im dying
I think of you

I can write awesome lyrics too!!

EDIT: alex..quit beating me to the same post

12-10-2005, 03:51 PM	#13 (permalink)
madeinNY [[la de da diddy da]] Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: NY...duh. Posts: 444	That 'twas the musical equivalent of... I can't think of anything. That was just awful. I'm sorry. It's just...so overused. Ahh. Just thought of something. The musical equivalent of The Apprentice, the same thing being done over and over except with different people. __________________ I cleared out my PM box...I promise. lol

12-10-2005, 01:38 AM	#11 (permalink)
A_Perfect_Sonnet Dinosaurus Rex!!! Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Winchester, VA Posts: 896	Those look most like Atreyu lyrics to me.

12-10-2005, 09:10 AM	#12 (permalink)
~~bungalow~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Hot-lanta Posts: 3,140	Yikes! People should really stop writing music after girls brake up with them. Take a myspace junkies advice....and next time your girl brakes up with you, just kill yourself. It would spares us from these kind of ** lyrics. Sounds like another **ty song that would be a hit for 12 year old girls to make as their usernames at music forums........ Now ...The chorus is so cliche and cheesy, come on "Broken lips utter words of despair" "who do you think you are, just who do you think you are" this made me laugh also it needs some.....ok alot of work. Take out the cliche chorus and verses and bridge.....and work with what youve got left

12-10-2005, 07:40 PM	#15 (permalink)
Laces Out Dan! I love Puck Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: British Columbia Posts: 4,614	Well to say the least i Hated it....and also why is every n00b that ever posts a song on here always writing about death and stupid **** like that....And i think the worst line in the whole song is "Cut My Life and Kill a Stranger" Like for F*ck Sucks

12-10-2005, 08:47 PM	#17 (permalink)
-xdistored_lifex- Groupie Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 9	You Guys Obviously Dont Know Nething About Music If U Guyz Think Ur So Good Y Doesnt Someone Battle Me With Their Lyrics. We'll See Who Is The Better Songwriter. Burning Ansgt Awaits Those Who Spitefully Contrast My Afflictions. Just Made That Up And It Burns Nething U Could Evr Do

12-10-2005, 08:48 PM	#18 (permalink)
~~bungalow~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Hot-lanta Posts: 3,140	Oh.....I'll challenge you Here it goes

12-10-2005, 08:54 PM	#19 (permalink)
~~bungalow~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Hot-lanta Posts: 3,140	I woke up the other day and cried I was sad because because my girlfriend died So I cut my wrists through the vein My life is so hard that I cant feel pain xxI slit my wrists for you xx xx I sat and Cried for you xx xxI died my hair black to be cool xx xxI wish i could see you xx My life is an abyss of pain Falling through a spiral of razorblade game Someone murder me cause I dont wanna wake up again Bye bye my life love lost For you I pay the bloody cost xxI cut my wrists for you xx xx I took my life for you xx xx My broken tears are silent on your back xx I would fuck you If i was a necropheliac BEAT THAT BITCH