wut do u think of my song? (lyrics, quote, bands)

-xdistored_lifex- · 12-09-2005, 10:02 PM

hey I wrote this song last nyte aftur i broke up with my girlfriend. tell me wut u think:

who do you think you are?
destroy my life, leave me to die.
just, who do you think you are

I gave my heart and soul for your existance
pitiful, I know
but theres just no resistance

CHORUS
broken lips utter words of despair
(who do you think you are, just who do you think you are)
the sky is falling, I can see it in the air
(who do you think you are, just who do you think you are)

this pitiful existance called life has got the best of me
I gave up freedom and joy,
you got the best of me.

death blood hate anger
cut my life and kill a stranger

CHORUS

end this life I live
giving you all I give
who do you think you are?

sleepy jack · 12-09-2005, 10:04 PM

Wow.
We have a song writing forum but i'll save your time.
That was cliched to the max and just plain BAD.

riseagainstrocks · 12-09-2005, 10:36 PM

i think his screenname was supposed to be "destroyed life"

gross.

and the song = the suck

Spikey · 12-09-2005, 10:45 PM

Yeah it is but*giggles* I'm nicking all your lyrics putting and taking them apart for a new song!!! (evil cackle)

Unfortunatly this song is of no use to me

mosesandtherubberducky · 12-09-2005, 10:47 PM

Not to you mr. song writer man but welcome to being concious of what is being made. That song would probably be a hit if a band of the likes of Fall Out Boy or MCR put it out...its sad

Oh and that song sucked it had no real depth to it and for christ's sake use a different pattern than ABA or simple variations of that.

sleepy jack · 12-09-2005, 10:49 PM

Hawthorne Heights or Senses Fail yes.
Fall Out Boy maybe.
MCR no all their lyrics have a dark vampire feel to them *cept for like a few*.

mosesandtherubberducky · 12-09-2005, 10:51 PM

It's kinda short too but thats all good Alexisonfire has 44 Cal. Love Letter.

PerFeCTioNThrUSileNCe · 12-10-2005, 12:15 AM

meh......

the song is crap. its all been done before. my suggestion....stop writing, or take a creative writing class. and post songs in the "song writing forum"

thank you.

*secretly knows this dude will never be back..*

-xdistored_lifex- · 12-10-2005, 12:42 AM

You guys have clearly never heard anything out of the mainstream. I mean, MCR? Alexisonfire? Get some taste other than what's on your .99 MacDonalds menu. Like, seriously, try From First to Last, they echo my soul and it's burning passion of flames.

They're like sirloin.

You guys know Nothing about good lyrics.

PerFeCTioNThrUSileNCe · 12-10-2005, 12:50 AM

and clearly....neither do you.

ive written my share of songs. and been in my share of bands. i know good lyrics when i see them.

and your lyrics are cliche and overdone. every other band has a song thats almost identical.

Quote:

You guys have clearly never heard anything out of the mainstream. I mean, MCR? Alexisonfire? Get some taste other than what's on your .99 MacDonalds menu. Like, seriously, try From First to Last, they echo my soul and it's burning passion of flames.

you talk about us not knowing anything out of the mainstream.....and then you mention from first to last.

Quote:

they echo my soul and it's burning passion of flames.

and what the hell is that?

12-09-2005, 10:02 PM	#1 (permalink)
-xdistored_lifex- Groupie Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 9	wut do u think of my song? hey I wrote this song last nyte aftur i broke up with my girlfriend. tell me wut u think: who do you think you are? destroy my life, leave me to die. just, who do you think you are I gave my heart and soul for your existance pitiful, I know but theres just no resistance CHORUS broken lips utter words of despair (who do you think you are, just who do you think you are) the sky is falling, I can see it in the air (who do you think you are, just who do you think you are) this pitiful existance called life has got the best of me I gave up freedom and joy, you got the best of me. death blood hate anger cut my life and kill a stranger CHORUS end this life I live giving you all I give who do you think you are?

12-09-2005, 10:36 PM	#3 (permalink)
riseagainstrocks Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: DC Posts: 3,320	i think his screenname was supposed to be "destroyed life" gross. and the song = the suck __________________ One note timeless, came out of nowhere...

12-09-2005, 10:45 PM	#4 (permalink)
Spikey Music Addict Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 277	Yeah it is butgiggles I'm nicking all your lyrics putting and taking them apart for a new song!!! (evil cackle) Unfortunatly this song is of no use to me __________________ www.myspace.com/emeraldskyrock

12-09-2005, 10:47 PM	#5 (permalink)
mosesandtherubberducky butt say x Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: so i read the question as "Where YOU live" which was kinda funny instead of "Where you live" Posts: 1,649	Not to you mr. song writer man but welcome to being concious of what is being made. That song would probably be a hit if a band of the likes of Fall Out Boy or MCR put it out...its sad Oh and that song sucked it had no real depth to it and for christ's sake use a different pattern than ABA or simple variations of that. __________________ Can I have a youtube video for a sig? There's a thing that says "Wrap [YOUTUBE] tags around selected text"

12-09-2005, 10:51 PM	#7 (permalink)
mosesandtherubberducky butt say x Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: so i read the question as "Where YOU live" which was kinda funny instead of "Where you live" Posts: 1,649	It's kinda short too but thats all good Alexisonfire has 44 Cal. Love Letter. __________________ Can I have a youtube video for a sig? There's a thing that says "Wrap [YOUTUBE] tags around selected text"

12-10-2005, 12:42 AM	#9 (permalink)
-xdistored_lifex- Groupie Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 9	You guys have clearly never heard anything out of the mainstream. I mean, MCR? Alexisonfire? Get some taste other than what's on your .99 MacDonalds menu. Like, seriously, try From First to Last, they echo my soul and it's burning passion of flames. They're like sirloin. You guys know Nothing about good lyrics.