the link ya gave me...ring a bell?

oh ya!!!! :o)

sorry

but ya i;m going back to being 32 now haha :o)

this conversation is weird, haha.

written anything else, Sabrina?

yea a few things i'll going to look in my "song writting book" and i'll see if i find something worth being picked apart to put in here ;p

ok cool, i look forward to it. ;)

hahah here we go!!!



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soon you won't be able to breath
i'll sufforcate you with all my needs
holding on to you like a heart disease
fighting my eevry emotional need

can't bretah
falling on my knees
hold me!
holde me please!!

you can't see the things in me
the things you can't open your eyes to see
something you won't believe
please!
open your eyes to me

damaged heart lay down for rest
try to taste this happiness
breaking lines to enter your heart
falling apart, holdin on.. i'll past the test

can't breath
falling on my knees
hold me!
hold me please!!

damaged heart won't you stay
hold on to me
hold me closem don't break away


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thoughts!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This one is actually very good...

really.. thank you!!! got a favorite part??

the can't breathe, fallin on my knees part ;)

so theres nothing you think shoudl be added taken away??? nothing??/

breaking lines to enter your heart....didn't get that part....

such as
you know how you can cross a line between friends and lovers.. well thats it.. :o)

aha...well then, there is nothing i would change :)

:o) woooooooooooooooooooooooo! makes me smile

:)

Comfort in Empties Arm’s



Falling to my feet…… again
Drown you in my empty soul
Taken mindless pleasure in… this

Games you’ve played
Lies you’ve said

I’m a moron because of ……. You
Thought I should try to trust in….. You

Carry out my other victims
Break my body…. Down
Kill the eyes that steal…. Your soul

**** you... I’ve got my life to lose

I am just an insane creation of……. Everything that’s ill
Trust into the saneness of your lies
Carry you into the sweetest dreams

Break you down….
Here’s the…….
MISERY!

Bringing you down…. So far down
Bring you down… so far down
Bringing you down… so far down
Bring you so far down…



i'm not sure if i put that song there yet or not.. just cope with me here tho..
in this song if i coudl ver in fact put music behind it some day this is what it would be like ...

where theres a line.. and then alot dots like this are there ............ in between whatever and another word its a stop then the word puts in then dragging it into the line under it.. get it.. haha hmmm! i';m confuseing anyways.. and thats what the song would be like.. and there is no real course in the song still the end..

Break you down….
Here’s the…….
MISERY!

Bringing you down…. So far down
Bring you down… so far down
Bringing you down… so far down
Bring you so far down…

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that part i guess would be course like.. but in between the two couruse parts i would have just instruments and it would rock!!!

It sounds like a revenge song, which is kind of cliche....but there's originality in the way you would things...it's a little confusing, but if you decipher a little it's quite good.

yea i wrote that song last night i think.. or the night before either way.. i like it.... i just wish i coudl make it real some how haha!

Well wait, you play guitar, right?

no i used to.. but i don't have one any more!! :o(

aw...well maybe you can buy one...

yea thats a good idea.. want to send me the money for that ahhaha.. me being poor doesn't help my non musical carrer take off haha

ohhhh lol..well do you know anyone who has a guitar??

i do.. but most of my friends can't play guitar so they fake they do and would never let me touch theres in fear that i would be better then them..

at least i know i can't play it.. but i try and i would rather make my own stuff other then just learning every other song by nirvana!! haha

new song.. well to put in here that is.. but i wrote this along time ago too! so please rip it apart and enjoy!! haha

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Eviction of the Affection


The secrets of you and me lies beneath my feet
Deep within the ground
Spinning round and round

My kisses are cold
My arms they won’t hold…
LET GO!

I can’t do this
Don’t let …
Go…

(Course)
My heart stains you
My soul hates you
With every bit of eviction I have
I will blame you

Oddly knowing there is no control
Whisper to you through the ground
Spinning round and round

(Course)
My heart stains you
My soul hates you
With every bit of eviction I have
I will blame you
Cause I ****ing hate you...

Circle the hate around my soul
I will let you diminish away
Ha-ha! … Insane in the things I think
Imagination takes control
Ha-ha! … You think you made me whole

(Course)
My heart stains you
My soul hates you
With every bit of eviction I have
I blame it on you
My heart stains you
My soul hates you
With every bit of affection I had
I still blame you
Cause I ****ing hate you…
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now begin to rip!

this is the best thing in this thread :)

but this: My heart stains you

and this: Whisper to you through the ground

don't make sense to me...and how are you going to fit the Ha ha's in?

the hahas are a stop in the song.. where the music every thing stops then the drms slowly creep in and then laughs in the back round but only from one person.. and its just a simple haha.. and then kind creeps back into singing.. haha

i have a strange tool inspried song writing and singing style haha

haha sounds cool G'luck ;)

yea i'll need it haha.. tool inspried me write.. yet when i write some of stuff like the last few songs i'm sent you.. i can picture them beign like tool songs.. yet i can also picture them beign acoustic only songs haha.. know what i';m saying?

yea, i get it ;)

what is tool??

the band DUHHHHHHHHHHHHH!

oh...earth to me. my bad. lol

hhaha crack me up and call me sally sue!!!