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Old 01-05-2006, 05:19 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default "Things You Can't Say In Songs"

A/N: Nothing but helpful critism will be accepted....and IDK..there is something...like...wrong with it...it doesn't seem to flow so well. Please help.

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There's things you can't say in songs
Shouldn't say in songs
Things people don't say in songs

Like how you're happy someone's dead
Happy you killed them
Happy they're resting in peace

Like how you smiled
When you shot them
When the shell fell

They're better off
Trading in suffering for the inevitable
They smiled when they died
They're resting in peace

There's things you can't say in songs
But if you give people a chance
To understand
To comprehend
They'll understand
The things you can't say...
Are the things that make you smile

Every other song
About a broken heart...
Or shedding some concocted tears

How 'bout originality?
Something about gun shots and long-awaited deaths?
About resting in peace?
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Old 01-06-2006, 04:07 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Please review this and my "all i wanna care about" song...pleaseeeee...
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