or you could put four other things for what you're dancing for



at first i was like :( :mad: , but i read the no offense thing & then im like :rolleyes:

like in a different line? I could do that...

damn it. i would have got away with it if it wasn't for you meddling teenagers.

really? your face went through that many colours and emotions? im not that special

this song is one big cliche... i continue to dislike the contrived feel i get from your songs

you know what i mean*shaking head*. Im black remember(for the changing colors thing). no you really arent that special
















































j/p

creep, instead of saying you just plain dislike it, why don't you give some helpful critiscm :)

^in all fairness, he's given many many cirtiques in the past about her songs being cliche. All his critiques on her songs have been the same, so I'd imagine it gets tiring typing out why a song is cliche every time. I think it's helpful criticism just to hear that it IS cliche, that's more than enough to work on.

But all of my songs are NOT cliche, just a few. And no one else seemed to think this song is cliche...but that's beside the point.

CRITISCM (I can't spell, I know.) is telling a person why, and maybe ways to fix it.

By the way, telling people their songs are cliche is getting pretty damn cliche lol.

Why do my song threads always turn into an argument, with you, jibber? If your not going to critique the song please get out of my thread and PM me if you have a problem and maybe we could work it out instead of constantly fighting in threads and spamming.

I wasn't aware that this was an argument. I merely pointed out that creep's criticism WAS helpful, I wasn't being in any way argumentative. And I did critique the song, calling it cliched. But if you'd like a further and more in-depth critique, I'd be happy to give it to you. I'd say your song is cliched because the subjects you write about have been written about so many times that it becomes very repetitive and boring unless you say it in a unique way. Don't be so direct with your lines, and don't beat us over the head with obvious meaning. use metaphors and symbols to make us work a little more to find meaning in your lyrics. Then you'll have a more interesting song, it'll still convey what you want, and it wont be cliched.