Hell! - when this guy has an album Im buying!

Okay okay so I think we've clarified that this song sucks. To be honest I like the verses, but yeah I think the chorus could do with a lot of improvement. Could you guys try and give me more advice though?

in the chorus try one of the two

- focusing on one thing and one thing only.. bringing it to a hole new level

- open up the chorus make it short and sweet, but not too details and clean like the rest of the song..

just my thoughts.

i dont mind it.

It needs a chorus other than that its k

Hell! I'm not.

Yes, change the chorus. I for one am down with the whole god bashing thing, but "Bad names for jesus" sounds like a rubbish playground chant and "whore" just doesn't make much sense (unless its a criticism of omnipresence).

How about:

When Jesus rode a donkey he was riding his dad
Because God is an ass
God is an ass

If you like it feel free to use it!

Haha that is classic. I'm changing the whore part.

Okay then so the whore part is changed. What does everyone think now?

i like it hobo.. you made the song a lot better i think :D good job!