Caught up in a moment
 

Forever she said maybe they didn't know/
but when the push comes to shove the quick turn to slow/
she held her husbands hand as he drifted off/
her world is now haunted by his splutters and coughs/

CHORUS
Caught up in a moment/
she's caught up in a moment/
caught up in a moment/
don't forget/

Stagnant souls drifting along the highway/
they can smell her tears since her mind turned grey/
"What will it take for another sleep?"/
she says, tuning into the voices of the weak/

CHORUS
Caught up in a moment/
she's caught up in a moment/
caught up in a moment/
don't forget/

She stares into the sun till it burns her eyes/
so bright, so bright it's advertised/
But she knows her world will change when the moon appears/
because with the dark also comes her fears/

CHORUS
Caught up in a moment/
she's caught up in a moment/
caught up in a moment/
don't forget/

what type of sound woudl you go for if you ever put this song to voice, and instuments?

I don't know to be honest. I was thinking an eerie melody in the background of the verses, with a more upbeat tune for the chorus.

ahh well.. that seems alright i suppose..
but i think you should do something more with the chorus dear.

I just want to see whether the lyrics are substantial first-what do you think of them?

i like the lyrics, there alright. i can't get myself to focus on them to be honest, because i get to the chorus and it just draws in my attention.

I do like the verse.
I know it's tiring to hear such an obvious thing, but I think the chorus is a little too repetitive,
it just needs a small bit of variation or a twist to it.

yea basically what i was saying. haha

The chorus' in my songs really aren't doing well at the moment. I used to be good at chorus' but bad at verses, now the tide has changed.

But that's good!
I think verses are a lot harder to change.