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04-04-2006, 07:47 PM | #1 (permalink) |
a l'amou fou pou tout
Join Date: Dec 2005
Location: NY
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zombie
Right now, I’m just a walking zombie/
Waiting for someone to find me/ Looking for somewhere to hide/ While she or he takes how much ever time/ Mother why must you scream at me/ Can’t you see I’m losing my sanity/ You don’t notice the emptiness overwhelming me/ Now I truly know how it feels to die/ So I sit down on the bathroom floor/ I’m holding the needle to my left arm/ Needle filled with air to kill/ I just can’t bring myself to end it like this/ But I still want you to suffer from guiltiness/ ...still working on it(meaning this is just the starting). but what do you think so far? |
04-05-2006, 09:05 AM | #4 (permalink) |
Don't think twice
Join Date: Dec 2005
Location: A basement on the hill
Posts: 352
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the start is alright but remove the bit about the razor. make it less obvious.
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Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation |
04-05-2006, 09:13 AM | #6 (permalink) |
Don't think twice
Join Date: Dec 2005
Location: A basement on the hill
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adders. like cleopatra.
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Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation |
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