~Disappointed~
You were doing so well I thought you would keep it up
You want me to trust you but you don’t show me why Is it him that made you go back on it Or is it them that persuaded you You were happier and we got along better But now that’s all draining away I don’t want to lose you again and I don’t want it to be The way it use to be, I just want you to stay clean You’re once again becoming a little piece of nothing To stoned to be thinking of what’s real Hidden behind walls and unable to see I thought you were strong but now I see you are weak I’m trying to stay here for you but you’re making it hard on me Thorns of time against the rose of the world Soon enough it’ll be different, and you won’t have me But maybe you’ll be happy since you still got your weed. |
i like your rap songs better, these ones just seem so blurrrrtet.
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this isnt a song hun
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then what is it? teenage cliche rant?
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yeah definitely not crazy about it, among other things, there's really no flow at all to it. plus, you're tackling a pretty serious subject with this one, and the language you've used makes it come off too predictable, and not really compelling enough to do justice to such a serious subject. But I think if you reworked it a bit to make your point in a less predictable way, it could be really good.
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Fixed it up a lil bit, what you think?
Now im actually trying, before it was just a "rant", i guess. to mad to think straight. |
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