2 songs 1 rap (mic, classic)

angel18 · 04-09-2006, 05:14 AM

Outta Control

[chorus]
I'm not healthy,
Won't somebody help me,
Before I get so sick,
That I can't be saved,
I'm not healthy,
Won't somebody help me,
Before I get so sick,
And I won't be saved.

[verse1]
I thought I was being brave,
By taking all these tablets,
I'm under so much stress,
That I can't live without them,
I take two ever hour,
They make me feel better,
But I made the biggest mistake,
Forgetting they're not save.

[chorus]
I'm not healthy,
Won't somebody help me,
Before I get so sick,
That I can't be saved,
I'm not healthy,
Won't somebody help me,
Before I get so sick,
And I won't be saved.

[verse2]
I’ve forgotten what to say,
How I'm suppose to control,
Everything my kids do,
Gives me a headache,
So I just take another,
It makes my problems go away,
Then for the rest of the day,
I'm feeling okay.

[chorus]
I'm not healthy,
Won't somebody help me,
Before I get so sick,
That I can't be saved,
I'm not healthy,
Won't somebody help me,
Before I get so sick,
And I won't be saved.

[bridge]
I'm on edge lying on my bed,
My head's spinning so fast,
I'm outta control,
Don't know when it's gonna pass,
I don't want it to last,
My eyes are closing shut,
I'm starting to give up,
I'd do anything to make it end.

[chorus]
I'm not healthy,
Won't somebody help me,
Before I get so sick,
That I can't be saved,
I'm not healthy,
Won't somebody help me,
Before I get so sick,
And I won't be saved.

She is the one

[verse1]
There is a girl out there,
She doesn't even care,
What you say or do,
She'll make your dreams come true.

[chorus]
She is the one,
For you,
She is meant,
For you.

[verse2]
When you meet her,
You can't speak to her,
You don't know what to say,
Then you run away.

[chorus]
She is the one,
For you,
She is meant,
For you.

[verse3]
She's thinking "what the ****?,
I thought he wanted a suck",
She's thinking "it's all my fault,
But still why did he have to bolt".

[chorus]
She is the one,
For you,
She is meant,
For you.

[verse4]
That's the end,
My stupid friend,
She was the one,
Here's a gun.

[chorus]
She is the one,
For you,
She is meant,
For you.

Where's the Mic at

[verse1]
Is this what life is,
Show me where the knife is,
Before I go crazy with hate,
Stab him before it's too late,
For what's about to come,
Tell my little bro to go home,
I don't want him to see,
What will probably happen to me,
I'll die to save my mom,
Even if it makes me the stupid one,
I just don't give a **** about my dad,
Him making my brothers and sisters sad,
He's trying to be the big man,
Nobody knows my ****ing plan,
To get rid of him I can't wait,
I know this is my ****ing fate.

[chorus]
Show me where the mic is at,
Tell you all a little fact,
I'm not the one who's got your back.
Show me where the mic is at,
Tell you all a little fact,
I'm not the one who's got your back.

[verse2]
I'm ready to complete the task,
Of putting a bullet in my dad's ass,
Can't wait to see him scream,
This must be all a ****ing dream,
Just to make sure he is dead,
I'll put another bullet in his head,
Now I have to get rid of him,
Maybe stuff him in the rubbish bin,
Now I'm going to my girlfriend who's a slut,
And I'm gonna to **** her up the butt.

[chorus]
Show me where the mic is at,
Tell you all a little fact,
I'm not the one who's got your back.
Show me where the mic is at,
Tell you all a little fact,
I'm not the one who's got your back.

Okay my mate needs help on a third verse for Where's the mic at and I've written the other two, let me know what ya'll think?

TrampInaTux · 04-10-2006, 06:49 AM

Haha is the where is the mic at one a joke? Because it had me laughing. I do like the 'Tell me where the mic is at and I'll tell you all a little fact' line though. And the 'put a bullet in my Dad's ass' line is also a classic, but maybe for the wrong reasons.

angel18 · 04-10-2006, 01:18 PM

my mate says thanks for the comment. He doesn't know what he should do for the next verse any ideas?

Crazy Luv · 04-10-2006, 02:47 PM

at first i didnt like Outta Control, but then i started to

at first i liked She is the One, but then i didnt

Where the Mics At is okay, i like it, its funny
I cant help you with ideas for the 3rd verse

TrampInaTux · 04-11-2006, 01:37 AM

Okay now I've read them all. Outta Control=average. First verse needs sorting and I think you should develop on each idea that you use instead of just shaving the surface. And try not to talk about the tablets-hint at them, but never mention them and see how that works.

She is the one=Majory dislike. The verses are bad and I can't see any redeeming qualities.

Where is the mic=So awfully good. It's really really REALLY bad but I like it because of that. It's not something you should record or anything, but it's a good jokey song. The put a bullet in my Dad's ass line is a classic.

angel18 · 04-12-2006, 10:59 AM

okay I'm re writing Outta Control at the moment, I wrote She Is The One for fun and my mate's writing the third verse for Where is the mic at. I'll be reposting the finished versions of all the songs!

04-09-2006, 05:14 AM	#1 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	2 songs 1 rap Outta Control [chorus] I'm not healthy, Won't somebody help me, Before I get so sick, That I can't be saved, I'm not healthy, Won't somebody help me, Before I get so sick, And I won't be saved. [verse1] I thought I was being brave, By taking all these tablets, I'm under so much stress, That I can't live without them, I take two ever hour, They make me feel better, But I made the biggest mistake, Forgetting they're not save. [chorus] I'm not healthy, Won't somebody help me, Before I get so sick, That I can't be saved, I'm not healthy, Won't somebody help me, Before I get so sick, And I won't be saved. [verse2] I’ve forgotten what to say, How I'm suppose to control, Everything my kids do, Gives me a headache, So I just take another, It makes my problems go away, Then for the rest of the day, I'm feeling okay. [chorus] I'm not healthy, Won't somebody help me, Before I get so sick, That I can't be saved, I'm not healthy, Won't somebody help me, Before I get so sick, And I won't be saved. [bridge] I'm on edge lying on my bed, My head's spinning so fast, I'm outta control, Don't know when it's gonna pass, I don't want it to last, My eyes are closing shut, I'm starting to give up, I'd do anything to make it end. [chorus] I'm not healthy, Won't somebody help me, Before I get so sick, That I can't be saved, I'm not healthy, Won't somebody help me, Before I get so sick, And I won't be saved. She is the one [verse1] There is a girl out there, She doesn't even care, What you say or do, She'll make your dreams come true. [chorus] She is the one, For you, She is meant, For you. [verse2] When you meet her, You can't speak to her, You don't know what to say, Then you run away. [chorus] She is the one, For you, She is meant, For you. [verse3] She's thinking "what the **?, I thought he wanted a suck", She's thinking "it's all my fault, But still why did he have to bolt". [chorus] She is the one, For you, She is meant, For you. [verse4] That's the end, My stupid friend, She was the one, Here's a gun. [chorus] She is the one, For you, She is meant, For you. Where's the Mic at [verse1] Is this what life is, Show me where the knife is, Before I go crazy with hate, Stab him before it's too late, For what's about to come, Tell my little bro to go home, I don't want him to see, What will probably happen to me, I'll die to save my mom, Even if it makes me the stupid one, I just don't give a about my dad, Him making my brothers and sisters sad, He's trying to be the big man, Nobody knows my ing plan, To get rid of him I can't wait, I know this is my ing fate. [chorus] Show me where the mic is at, Tell you all a little fact, I'm not the one who's got your back. Show me where the mic is at, Tell you all a little fact, I'm not the one who's got your back. [verse2] I'm ready to complete the task, Of putting a bullet in my dad's ass, Can't wait to see him scream, This must be all a ing dream, Just to make sure he is dead, I'll put another bullet in his head, Now I have to get rid of him, Maybe stuff him in the rubbish bin, Now I'm going to my girlfriend who's a slut, And I'm gonna to ** her up the butt. [chorus] Show me where the mic is at, Tell you all a little fact, I'm not the one who's got your back. Show me where the mic is at, Tell you all a little fact, I'm not the one who's got your back. Okay my mate needs help on a third verse for Where's the mic at and I've written the other two, let me know what ya'll think?

04-10-2006, 06:49 AM	#2 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Haha is the where is the mic at one a joke? Because it had me laughing. I do like the 'Tell me where the mic is at and I'll tell you all a little fact' line though. And the 'put a bullet in my Dad's ass' line is also a classic, but maybe for the wrong reasons.

04-10-2006, 01:18 PM	#3 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	my mate says thanks for the comment. He doesn't know what he should do for the next verse any ideas?

04-10-2006, 02:47 PM	#4 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	at first i didnt like Outta Control, but then i started to at first i liked She is the One, but then i didnt Where the Mics At is okay, i like it, its funny I cant help you with ideas for the 3rd verse

04-11-2006, 01:37 AM	#5 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Okay now I've read them all. Outta Control=average. First verse needs sorting and I think you should develop on each idea that you use instead of just shaving the surface. And try not to talk about the tablets-hint at them, but never mention them and see how that works. She is the one=Majory dislike. The verses are bad and I can't see any redeeming qualities. Where is the mic=So awfully good. It's really really REALLY bad but I like it because of that. It's not something you should record or anything, but it's a good jokey song. The put a bullet in my Dad's ass line is a classic.

04-12-2006, 10:59 AM	#6 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	okay I'm re writing Outta Control at the moment, I wrote She Is The One for fun and my mate's writing the third verse for Where is the mic at. I'll be reposting the finished versions of all the songs!