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Old 04-28-2006, 03:04 PM   #1 (permalink)
that's my war face.
 
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Default And then the fire burns out

May you make amends
we're dying to carry on
Can't we all be friends
It's been so very long

And then the fire burns out
and the smoke settles down
and we're back to where we started
with a plastic smile and a frown

Trust me it's the truth
everything I have said
I put it down to youth
Whirlwinds in our heads

And then the fire burns out
and the smoke settles down
and we're back to where we started
with a plastic smile and a frown
And then the fire-it burns out
rain drops split up shouts
and we're taken back again
and I'm forced to defend her

I've heard it all before
but this time I am shaking
maybe this means so much more
why is my heart breaking?

And then the fire burns out
and the smoke settles down
and we're back to where we started
with a plastic smile and a frown
and then the fire-it burns out
rain drops split up shouts
and we're taken back again
and I'm forced to defend her...
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Old 04-28-2006, 06:09 PM   #2 (permalink)
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I like it, but I think it would be better if you dropped all the ands at the start of each line. Just my opinion though.
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Old 05-01-2006, 11:05 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Yeh The Ands I Dont Like That In The Lyrics Maybe Try And Change ?
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