Mister Man
 

In the other world
the people treated him so nice
now he has returned
to the whinges of his wife
He loses his mind a second
then gets back to following orders
from everyone around him
pointing out his disorders

CHORUS
Try Mister Man to stay on plan
We know they aren't very nice
although when they try they can, can, can...

Go back to bed, Mister
don't worry they won't miss y'
strangers lips on your wife's
you never were a good kisser
in fact you aren't good at anything
except for paying for your wife to live
and where's that necklace you bought before?
Why it's on your brother's bedroom floor

CHORUS
Try Mister Man to stay on plan
We know they aren't very nice
although when they try they can, can, can...



This is very technoish... the beat I've got in my head at least. Let's just say I've tried something different. So I REALLY do need your thoughts on this one.

I like the verses, but i dont the chorus. overall, i like where you're going with this one.

I like the story and the flow so, good job.

its clear there is a story there, but i don't think it fits well as a song. but good try tho.

i agree with crazy luv, the verses are good but i just dont like the chorus