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Old 05-01-2006, 08:19 PM   #1 (permalink)
a l'amou fou pou tout
 
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Remember the promises we vowed for forever
Seems as if now they're just buryed treasure
It seems as if you turned on me
How could we create this rivalry
The memories, they float along the wind
It's unusual how our secrets still circulate within

Here's something to sing-along
Here's something to remember
'Til the end of many decembers
There are parts that were mistold
There are parts we should have known
Because, we were that close

We're both not ready for this alliance to end
Seems as if those thoughts are strangely comdemned
It's wrong to move on from such a bond left uncomplete
Which is the cause for me writing with this pen and sheet
But it's to late, to late, is what we are foretold
But it's the heart, the heart, promises is what it holds

Here’s something to sing-along
Here’s something to think about
Somethings you'll even try to doubt
There are things that are mistold
There are things that need to be disclosed
Because, we were that close
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Old 05-02-2006, 03:24 AM   #2 (permalink)
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i think this is good, probably one of your best so far!
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Old 05-02-2006, 10:39 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Really good, apart from the fact that it's `foretold` not `fortold` I see nothing wrong with this whatsoever. Bloody brill'!
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Old 05-03-2006, 08:41 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Thank you guys for the comments.

And thank you Nikie for noticing that, never knew there was a E in it
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