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Old 05-02-2006, 01:40 PM   #1 (permalink)
that's my war face.
 
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Default HAHAHAHAHA (I'm proud of this one.....READ)

I'm trying my best but she just can't see it
I should cut out my rest I'm starting to get unfit
Here goes my new day with a brand new job
with a boss that hates my guts
C'mon people make a fuss of me

CHORUS
It's me birthday
Happy ****ing birthday
on a work day
Poxey ****ing work day
It's me birthday
Happy ****ing birthday
on a work day
poxey ****ing work day
Oh happy birthday to me

I stomp back home for a powernap
and I get divorce papers thrown on my lap
What a nice present, thank you dear
You don't need to explain the message is pretty clear
you all just have a ****ing problem

CHORUS
It's me birthday
Happy ****ing birthday
on a work day
poxey ****ing work day
it's me birthday
happy ****ing birthday
on a work day
poxey ****ing work day
Oh happy birthday to me

I got a parking fine for fifty quid
the cats got in the dustbin I never closed the lid
My laptop broke I've lost all the work I've did
my ex-lesbian-wife is pregnant with my kid
You try and tell me you had a worse day

CHORUS
It's me birthday
Happy ****ing birthday
on a work day
poxey ****ing work day
it's me birthday
happy ****ing birthday
on a work day
poxey ****ing work day
Oh happy birthday to me


Like the title says, I'm proud of this one. Any ways I can make it better? This is one I'm seriously thinking about keeping for the long haul when I try and follow my dreams of being in a band.
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Old 05-02-2006, 01:43 PM   #2 (permalink)
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LOL, I can't think of anything to go along with this, but nice job!
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Old 05-03-2006, 12:26 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Maybe a few too many F******* for commercial use?

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Old 05-03-2006, 12:28 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Commercialisation can suck my ****ing balls.
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Old 05-03-2006, 08:56 AM   #5 (permalink)
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I like the stanzas(except the last lines in each), but i dont like the chorus.
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Old 05-04-2006, 09:39 AM   #6 (permalink)
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i agree with crazy luv some of the last lines for the stanzas just don't go right for me
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Old 05-04-2006, 09:51 AM   #7 (permalink)
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It would be awesome if sung by this guy:




The loveable loser
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Old 05-04-2006, 02:41 PM   #8 (permalink)
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i don't like this at all hobo, if ****ing wasn't even there it would seem like a very catchy annoying music channel song.. that would get annoying fast to many lsiteners... i think its the chourse personally thay just bugs me. and then the second last lines before the ending of the last chourse just seems well like rap?
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Old 05-04-2006, 06:27 PM   #9 (permalink)
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*sighs* oh well I guess this song will have to be sang by the loveable loser indeed.
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Old 05-04-2006, 06:29 PM   #10 (permalink)
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It could also be sang by the loveable loser brother....but ugly

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