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Old 05-16-2006, 03:21 PM   #1 (permalink)
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I think this is prolly the best of the three... but thats just me

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Lead or Gold
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If I’m supposed to be a savior, then why do I just lay here?
Thinking of how ill soon have wings and a crown of sunlit gold
Thinking of how whether dead in a coffin, or dead in a closet,
or alive in this bed, while the whole world watches.
Waiting as I wither, for the boys and the girls,
alive knowing they'd have died,
If I hadn’t done this to the world

And even still they struggle; and ask who god is testing
And they’re mothers will tell them
Question their failures, and never their blessings

(their failures and never my)

If I live I’m a waste, if I die I’m a hero
Now mother, please tell me, is that really a tear or
Are you waiting just like all of the rest?
I want to go home, but they say that im truly blessed.

(blessed)

Why should I care enough to open my eyes,
As long as I lie here, all I can do is hide
Like the people that will keep living just because of me
I’m not even dead yet, but I think soon I should be

What is a sacrifice?

(Put a face on this phantom
And call it an angel
What is a...)

Sacrifice

(Now hope comes in shimmers
And failures in flames)

Sacrifice

Watch them burn with me
(Sacrifice)
I won’t let this stay the same.
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Old 05-16-2006, 03:54 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Waiting to see what part three brings. Where have you been, you bastard?
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Old 05-16-2006, 04:05 PM   #3 (permalink)
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just been really busy, computers been down, renovations... whatever, im back.

and lol by the way that wasnt much of a crit
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Old 05-16-2006, 05:00 PM   #4 (permalink)
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I didn't come in here to crit your piece, I came to see where your slackass has been. I'm waiting for 3 to crit it all! Why crit an unfinished piece of work - cuz then I have to wonder, "Well maybe this will be explained in the next one, perhaps this will clarify things, etc etc.."
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