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Old 06-01-2006, 10:23 AM   #1 (permalink)
that's my war face.
 
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A silhouette of what we used to be
The outline of your frame, child, is tragic
Caught between the fence undecided where to leap
Then they realise his childhood they can't keep

Oh the years have been so cruel
Playing us all for fools
Die quietly please.

A memento from a simpler time
Photographic evidence of a smile
When the morning breaks I will still be by your side
Not through choice I've got nowhere else to hide

Oh the years have been so cruel
Playing us all for fools
Die quietly please.

A gateway which I can laugh and pretend
That my world is from its end
Hands behind my back facing the wall
Everyone around me but no one to call

Oh the years have been so cruel
playing us all for fools
Die quietly please.

Oh the years have been unkind
Tricking all of our minds
Bringing me to my knees.

Oh the years have been so cruel
playing us all for fools
Die quietly please.




My most personal lyrics so far... quite hard to write, but I did enjoy it and I've got a lot off my mind writing this which is always a good thing. Please comment
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Old 06-01-2006, 04:33 PM   #2 (permalink)
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I like it, like normally stuff like this is cliche but you wrote it in a very non-cliche way. Its good
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Old 06-01-2006, 05:54 PM   #3 (permalink)
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mm, sorry, but i don't understand this, care to explain
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Old 06-02-2006, 01:53 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Lol, were you crying and slitting your wrists while writing this?

Your breaking my heart.
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Old 06-02-2006, 02:05 AM   #5 (permalink)
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Surely you can't write with slit wrists?

Anyways, its a saddening song but like I said it got it off my mind. Even if it is very emo-ish.
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Old 06-02-2006, 07:35 AM   #6 (permalink)
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Good point, maybe you had 3 hands or something

Honest lyrics are always good, and well done for keeping the lyrics clean, not many people nowa days can write lyrics without saying the f*kc word or the s*it word in every sentance.
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Old 06-02-2006, 11:44 AM   #7 (permalink)
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I use them a lot, but they never suited this song so I left them out.

And yes I have 3 songs, but the 3rd one is always busy....
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Old 06-02-2006, 12:51 PM   #8 (permalink)
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I assume you mean 3 hands? - Man wouldn't it be brilliant to actully have 3 hands, 3 girls and 3 pus... Ill stop there.
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Old 06-10-2006, 01:10 PM   #9 (permalink)
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Captivating!!! There is nothing else i can say.
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