...for people.

i wrote this song when my computer was busted. it was just sitting in the corner pulled apart.

computer head

ive got a computer in my room but its all in pieces.
theres wires hanging everywhere cause theres a problem in the hard drive.
that means i cant go on the net and surf the world wide web
gotta do things face to face like a human being instead.

computers in my brain, computers in my head.
can a computer bring me back to life when im dead.
can a computer feel pain just like me and you.
i wouldnt be surprised if one of these days i become a computer too.

computer head,
computer head,
computer head.

computers are getting in eveywhere telling us what to do.
exchanging information on the planet internet.
where wired to the system and there taking control.
like a hidden virus infill-trating our souls.

computers in my brain, computers in my head.
can a computer bring me back to life when im dead.
can a computer feel pain just like me and you.
i wouldnt be surprised if one of these days you become a computer too.

computer head,
computer head,
computer head.

that is actually very helpful. but isnt saying to use everyday words, and then saying not to use cliche metaphors an oxymoron? or am i just a retard? whatever

All poems that begin "update" are amazing.

That's so true. Another good way to begin a poem is with "FYI".

elements
 

I find that a song will be very different based on which piece is designed first, i.e. melody, harmony, guitar track, drum track, lyrics, etc. It can be fun to write and record music and then write lyrics to go with the music while listening to it. I personally think this helps the lyrics match the song more closely, especially if one doesn't think about it and just lets it flow from whatever emotions the music conjures. Another option would be to write lyrics and music separately and then modifying each to fit the other, which can produce unique and often more intricate songs. There are basically limitless options, and each will give a little different feel to its resultant song.

Wow, great posts, for the most part, really helpful. Sleepyjack, dontrunme over, and crowe seem to have put a lot of thought into what they have to say. Thanks for taking the time.

can you really call it a poem if it only has ten words?
you dont call a book thats ten pages long a novel.
I think they should be called pokes
( perhaps a little childish, but i think its appropriate and whats wrong with being childish once in a while?)

ok... songwriting (lyrical) tip of the day:

Without over thinking it, write on paper what you are feeling, being as brutally honest as you possibly can. If it doesn't make sense, don't worry about it... just write until you have absolutely nothing else to say. Then walk away from it for a little bit and when you return, look at it and see what works and what doesn't... start constructing your song from there. If it takes you too long (more then 30 minutes) to put something together... throw it out, chances are it sucks anyway.

Writing Songs
 

well dear i am a good Song Writer and i promise all of you guys that i will submit my song to you guys within two days.