Her Petals, My Rose, How time unexpectedly goes (memory, hands)

TrampInaTux · 10-07-2006, 12:18 AM

The petals open and warmth is bred inside of her
(Beginning is a wonderful thing)
(Beginning is a wonderful thing)
A glimmer of innocence transported to her shattered eyes
Through teardrops and Godly design I am born again

Beginning is a wonderful thing

Tiny hands clasp her lungs her breath is stolen by her son
Through white halls we see them run
Breathe again, come on breathe for me
Gave up hope when I saw her fall
The killer emerges, fine, through it all

Beginning is a wonderful thing

Part of you but not of me
All this is, is a bad memory
This is rebirth
You don’t belong on this Earth

sleepy jack · 10-07-2006, 12:24 AM

On the first verse, i'd take out one of the "Beginning is a wonderful thing"s and replace it, mainly because it starts to get repetitive by the last time you used it.

Alot of the lines in this are very very pretty I like it, one of my favorites by you. Good work man.

TrampInaTux · 10-07-2006, 12:29 AM

This has a more environmental feel to it... in my head, beginning is a wonderful thing is said in the background in the first verse. I should have bracketed it really. Will do that now.

sleepy jack · 10-07-2006, 12:31 AM

Ahh okay, that makes more sense.

10-07-2006, 12:18 AM	#1 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Her Petals, My Rose, How time unexpectedly goes The petals open and warmth is bred inside of her (Beginning is a wonderful thing) (Beginning is a wonderful thing) A glimmer of innocence transported to her shattered eyes Through teardrops and Godly design I am born again Beginning is a wonderful thing Tiny hands clasp her lungs her breath is stolen by her son Through white halls we see them run Breathe again, come on breathe for me Gave up hope when I saw her fall The killer emerges, fine, through it all Beginning is a wonderful thing Part of you but not of me All this is, is a bad memory This is rebirth You don’t belong on this Earth

10-07-2006, 12:29 AM	#3 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	This has a more environmental feel to it... in my head, beginning is a wonderful thing is said in the background in the first verse. I should have bracketed it really. Will do that now.