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Old 12-03-2006, 04:55 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Your Girl

My heart,
Now missing a piece,
Your piece,
Yearns for your sweet caress.
Empty is my soul,
Now you have slipped from my grasp.
Dull, everything dull,
Without your sun on my face.
Your pretty warm smile,
No longer just for me.
So many cold tears,
Spilling from my blue glazed eyes.
Gliding down my cheeks,
And dying at my lips.
My cold lonely lips,
No longer deserve your kiss.
Every hour of every day,
Now just a wasted memory.
I love you,
I miss you,
So very much.
But what hurts the most,
Is that i am no longer,
Your girl...
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Old 12-04-2006, 10:13 PM   #2 (permalink)
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not bad, but I like the last 9 statements, but the beginning went off a rough start tho. sry to blunt then.
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Old 12-07-2006, 06:57 AM   #3 (permalink)
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not bad, but I like the last 9 statements, but the beginning went off a rough start tho. sry to blunt then.
No problem, I prefer honesty.
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Old 12-07-2006, 10:57 AM   #4 (permalink)
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A quite popular theme here, though I'm glad to see that sometimes girls get hurt too and it's not always another whiny male youth. Somehow when a girl goes through this, it always seems alot more justified to me but maybe that's just because they tend to post these sort of things a lot less.
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Old 12-08-2006, 01:50 PM   #5 (permalink)
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well it's would be good if it's were a little longer, it's make more sooth and pain lol.
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