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Old 12-04-2006, 12:49 PM   #1 (permalink)
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(verse 1)
i guess that i should feel much older, than i did or was before.

and i guess that i should feel much younger than i did or was before.

i guess that i should feel much stronger than i did or was before.

and i guess that i should feel much weaker than i was before.

(chorus)

and everything i left behind me
(everything i left behind me)
everything i left behind me
is a dark room

(verse 2)
i don't think i should've doubted you
i know i cannot live without you.

you fell into a hard place now you can't get out.

and i want you now.

and i thought maybe we should start up again.

(bridge)
we should start up again(4x)

(chorus)
(piano solo)

I thought that we made a connection
but i thought there was too much affection.
don't fail me now i'm cold and lonely.
i'm hopeless, sad,and crying my heart out

(bridge 2)
i'm cold and lonely(4x)

(chorus a few times then over)
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Old 12-04-2006, 04:46 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Thast cool i like it.I think you should try harder...
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Old 12-04-2006, 04:55 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Your rhyming is way too forced man, a good song doesn't need to rhyme.
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Old 12-04-2006, 09:27 PM   #4 (permalink)
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its ok......seems a bit formulaic though.
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