Stronger (lyrics, title, show, song, Hang)

angel18 · 01-08-2007, 12:46 PM

Ok I haven't actually posted anything up here for a long time now. So I'll show everybody something new from me. All comments and crits appreciated!

STRONGER
© Jane Walker

What did I do so wrong
To make you feel this way
As you walk towards me
Did I express my feelings
Of being used yet again
By another friend of mine

I’m sick of listening
To those words
Coming from your mouth
They don’t change
Anything between us
It just makes me
Stronger now

Did I put a camera to your face
And make you explain your mistakes
As you sit and stare into my eyes
You can’t hide all your lies
From me, coz I have no doubt
That I will them find, time and time again

I’m sick of listening
To those words
Coming from your mouth
They don’t change
Anything between us
It just makes me
Stronger now

I just wanted to hear
The truth from your mouth
But my voice got louder
You did nothing but shout
All the abuse you could think of
And I couldn't help but look
To the clouds above and wish
That I have never met you at all
All the stupid excuses you tried to use
And it took me so long to realize
It was the inner you

I’m sick of listening
To those words
Coming from your mouth
They don’t change
Anything between us
It just makes me
Stronger now

It makes me stronger
To the look in your eyes
Now I can finally hate
Everything you are
When I've come so far
To the brink of regret

It just makes me
Stronger now.

ZeppelinAir · 01-08-2007, 02:07 PM

not to bad, i like it

gottaSCREM · 01-08-2007, 04:35 PM

Pretty sweet.

tdoc210 · 01-08-2007, 04:38 PM

overdone.

~~[MERIT]~~ · 01-08-2007, 04:44 PM

The title keeps making me think of the Trust Co. song. Their version is better

angel18 · 01-09-2007, 11:02 AM

I'm actually surprised with the comments from everybody. I didn't know whether to post this or not, I thought that people wouldn't like it, but they do. Thanx

Angel

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 01-09-2007, 02:20 PM

Really? No offense, but, I didn't get that impression. Except from GottaSCREM. Black dot.

angel18 · 01-10-2007, 07:56 AM

Everybody has their different tastes in lyrics so I'm not offended.

Angel

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 01-10-2007, 01:35 PM

Check out some lit techniques. Helps alot. Also, learning new words. And I don't mean flipping through a thesaurus, I mean actually LEARNING new words. Good luck though.

angel18 · 01-11-2007, 06:19 AM

Thanx for the advice

01-08-2007, 12:46 PM	#1 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	Stronger Ok I haven't actually posted anything up here for a long time now. So I'll show everybody something new from me. All comments and crits appreciated! STRONGER © Jane Walker What did I do so wrong To make you feel this way As you walk towards me Did I express my feelings Of being used yet again By another friend of mine I’m sick of listening To those words Coming from your mouth They don’t change Anything between us It just makes me Stronger now Did I put a camera to your face And make you explain your mistakes As you sit and stare into my eyes You can’t hide all your lies From me, coz I have no doubt That I will them find, time and time again I’m sick of listening To those words Coming from your mouth They don’t change Anything between us It just makes me Stronger now I just wanted to hear The truth from your mouth But my voice got louder You did nothing but shout All the abuse you could think of And I couldn't help but look To the clouds above and wish That I have never met you at all All the stupid excuses you tried to use And it took me so long to realize It was the inner you I’m sick of listening To those words Coming from your mouth They don’t change Anything between us It just makes me Stronger now It makes me stronger To the look in your eyes Now I can finally hate Everything you are When I've come so far To the brink of regret It just makes me Stronger now.

01-08-2007, 02:07 PM	#2 (permalink)
ZeppelinAir Long time no see Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: somewhere in Michigan Posts: 512	not to bad, i like it __________________ not that old signature

01-08-2007, 04:38 PM	#4 (permalink)
tdoc210 ashes against the grain Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: new hampsha Posts: 2,617	overdone. __________________ We went back there and they had come and hacked off every inoculated arm. There they were in a pile. A pile of little arms. And I remember... I... I... I cried. I wept like some grandmother. I wanted to tear my teeth out. I didn't know what I wanted to do. And I want to remember it. I never want to forget it. I never want to forget. And then I realized... like I was shot... like I was shot with a diamond... a diamond bullet right through my forehead. And I thought: My God... the genius of that.

01-08-2007, 04:35 PM	#3 (permalink)
gottaSCREM A Thorn For Every Heart Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: U.S.A Posts: 248	Pretty sweet.

01-08-2007, 04:44 PM	#5 (permalink)
~~[MERIT]~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Missouri, USA Posts: 4,814	The title keeps making me think of the Trust Co. song. Their version is better

01-09-2007, 11:02 AM	#6 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	I'm actually surprised with the comments from everybody. I didn't know whether to post this or not, I thought that people wouldn't like it, but they do. Thanx Angel

01-10-2007, 07:56 AM	#8 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	Everybody has their different tastes in lyrics so I'm not offended. Angel

01-11-2007, 06:19 AM	#10 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	Thanx for the advice