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What Life Could He Have?
What Life Could He Have? A young boy confused about his life Mom and dad kicked him out on the street Walking around alone as usual The streetlights beam brighter tonight than ever before His shadow following him every step of the way He's not sure where he's going, all he knows is it's far away from home It amazes me the will of instinct An instinct that never wore off Moveing from home to home, city to city Trying to find somewhere he belongs Trying to find the family he never had Roads all lead to a destination Who knows where it might be He's made a home for himself In his own little world A world safe from the horrors of his broken home A broken home where he was caught in the middle And feel threw the cracks Desending into the great abyss The home that pushed him away The home he ran from every day Was the same home that took his life All the years running and hideing Searching for what he lost Searching for what he Desperately needed Cost him his life The same parents that pushed him away Now Apologizing over their sons coffin Never going to see their little boy again The last kiss goodbye, all those years wasted away It takes something like death for people to realize How selfish they acted It's a shame that moment didn't come sooner. Suggestions needed badly. Please!!!:) |
This reminds me a lot of my own writing actually. A story with characters we will for, a tragic ending - a gloomy message. nice.
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I really like that just the way it is!
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it has a pretty good image to it and it has some unique lines in it too, i like it
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Fix the ending, if you can't think of something better just word it better. I mean that really really sucks that that happen, and you say its just a shame? I'd consider it a goddamn heartbreaking look at a domestic problem that seems to happen quite frequently in american households.
It was alright, its nice to see a new user post a song that is actually good for once. |
Thanks:) . I should try to fix the end I'll see what I come up with
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Correct :)
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