Hammer Vs. Heart (dance)

Loser · 02-07-2007, 05:53 PM

Hammer Vs. Heart

Every mistake and glory went un-noticed
I say I love you only to fall on deaf ears
You pay more attention to the whispers in the wind
The music of the trees
I've accomplished so much
Knowing that it means nothing to you
Is like takeing a hammer
And smashing it like it was made of glass
I'll keep dreaming
For you to say the words you've ignored
I wish I could be the son you always wanted
The son you never had
I never wanted to be the Excess skin in the family
I guess we'll make believe everythings alright
To run from the truth
And hide from our feelings
When I stare into your eyes
I don't see the man I saw 10 years ago
I see the man that is disgusted and disappointed
With every move I make
These thoughts spin in my thoughts
Rewinding in my dreams
All I can be is me
Even if it isn't what you want me to be.

Sneer · 02-07-2007, 05:55 PM

good job.

Loser · 02-07-2007, 05:57 PM

Thanks

sleepy jack · 02-08-2007, 02:34 AM

*dances* you took my advice!, Its pretty good. I think it lacks, emotion? Thats not the right word but you could go more indepth on the feelings.

02-07-2007, 05:53 PM	#1 (permalink)
Loser The Professor Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: New York City Posts: 1,113	Hammer Vs. Heart Hammer Vs. Heart Every mistake and glory went un-noticed I say I love you only to fall on deaf ears You pay more attention to the whispers in the wind The music of the trees I've accomplished so much Knowing that it means nothing to you Is like takeing a hammer And smashing it like it was made of glass I'll keep dreaming For you to say the words you've ignored I wish I could be the son you always wanted The son you never had I never wanted to be the Excess skin in the family I guess we'll make believe everythings alright To run from the truth And hide from our feelings When I stare into your eyes I don't see the man I saw 10 years ago I see the man that is disgusted and disappointed With every move I make These thoughts spin in my thoughts Rewinding in my dreams All I can be is me Even if it isn't what you want me to be.

02-07-2007, 05:55 PM	#2 (permalink)
Sneer Let it drip Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 5,430	good job. __________________ LastFM Sneer's Emporium of Sound Fright Team radio show

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02-07-2007, 05:57 PM	#3 (permalink)
Loser The Professor Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: New York City Posts: 1,113	Thanks