Another Song. You Can Tell My Day Has been amazing Can't you.
 

A church on a lonely hilltop
makes even the strongest man cry sometimes
I'm on a road to ruin, in a bedsit, I'm strewn,
across the floor, with a photo frame in my hand

The long walk across the shore, says it all, I remember
when we could forget our lives for a second
over a cappuchino and a coffee table
faith is all so proposterous, we used to laugh,
now irony has took me down the path

road to ruin, in my bedroom, forgotten,
across the floor, with a photo frame in my hand





Done loads today, but I've seriously been a bit dangerously bored. Don't like this one, made in about 7 mins (yes I counted) thoughts?

I think someone needs a hug and to watch the pokemon movie.

Please change path to road or something else. The rhyming made me cringe. Some cleaning up and making it more connected wouldn't hurt though all in all it's pretty good.

Disconnected rambling. What the hell was this about. The church lines were good, and then you do nothing with them.

Sounds like it could've come from a country song.

Lol, strummer.

I didn't actually intend those words to rhyme.. I pronounce 'laugh' as 'larf'.

Maybe the next ones I write will be better... I'm not having another day in for a while, that's for sure.

Ta for the advice anyways, even though I'm really not gonna progress on this one.

A wise choice.