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Alo 03-08-2007 01:45 PM

rest in peace, you’re done
 
A guy I knew jumped off a building, I wrote this for him:

I cry for you bravery
Your sadness, your despair
For how you saw no other way
Because your life was so unfair

I imagine you standing at he edge
Clasping the rail tight
Then slowly loosening your grip
Stuck in a moral fight

Then letting go
The jump
The fall
The single thought
‘I’m done’

It’s over now, we’ll cry for you, rest in peace, you’re done.

ZeppelinAir 03-09-2007 02:38 AM

you miss spelled the^^^

its pretty good, short and to the point wish there was more imagery though

sleepy jack 03-09-2007 02:42 AM

I like the simpleness, but then again it also seems like it could be a good deal more. I can't explain it.

Alo 03-09-2007 04:46 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ZeppelinAir (Post 346841)
you miss spelled the^^^

its pretty good, short and to the point wish there was more imagery though

Where? If you mean then, it wasn't misspelled, I meant then.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowquill (Post 346843)
I like the simpleness, but then again it also seems like it could be a good deal more. I can't explain it.

I wish it were more, I feel so much more around this all. I just can't seem to put it into words. It just hurts, that he hated himself and his life so much. He was a great guy.

ZeppelinAir 03-09-2007 07:23 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Alo (Post 346634)
A guy I knew jumped off a building, I wrote this for him:

I cry for you bravery
Your sadness, your despair
For how you saw no other way
Because your life was so unfair

I imagine you standing at he edge
Clasping the rail tight
Then slowly loosening your grip
Stuck in a moral fight

Then letting go
The jump
The fall
The single thought
‘I’m done’

It’s over now, we’ll cry for you, rest in peace, you’re done.

right there, should have pointed it out better


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