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a quick fifteen minute thing i just wrote when i was bored and so i thought why not post cause well i am bored :D



Its so easy to forget what you have learned,
All those years washed away in a shower of ignorance,
Killing the trust between friends to feed your own sick desires,

But you say it was so easy,
But your crying now.

You always thought you could make it through,
And not be takin In by the moment Of wishes never to come true,
Make your way through fog to the ones you left astray,

And you thought it was so easy,
And your crying now.

Lost what you have and left on your own,
A broken boy without a home,
Its ironic that you hate to be alone,

Always thought it was so damn easy,
And your crying, your crying now

bump......

i want someone to give there opinion....please

"rain of ignorance"

Change it to shower of ignorance, its a small change but rain of *word here* is overused.

Take out damn in all but the final one. Its more effective that way.

i guess your right it does go better

any other opinions?

I really like it and crowquill was right I cant really find any other bad spots though.....