THERACONTEUR21

"I am about to give up" said the champion
The only reason is I do it for the love
Only reason they want me to do it
Is too keep the cash in their pockets

I started out loving the game
But soon I felt lack of competition
It became do or die to live this role
So I said I am done and crawled in a whole

No debates that end in arguments of belief
Don’t sedate the friend your grief
As I live with others now forgotten champion
The one that gave up and became a thinker

But see I said "when I am in the game I felt no pain"
No one was there I couldn’t see their stare
Money hungry vampires seeking their meal
But I close them out remember I don’t feel

Now listen to the forgotten champion
Find your way just trust in you
The time will come when you will stand up
Be who you are finding something new

THERACONTEUR21

i guess im the only one who like my stuff
i even spell checked it for ya (paper planes)
if ya look at it comment something

jibber

You're right, no SPELLING errors that I see, but about half of i is gramatically wrong. now on to the actual song....

the entire thing is a metaphor, but you never give the reader any inclination about what the metaphor is DESCRIBING. what game is it that the narrator is in? there's no indication whatsoever about what the song is about, for all we know is could be some kid who'd gotten tired of playing soccer. Not a very interesting subject.

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What you've done becomes the judge of what you're going to do -- especially in other people's minds. When you're traveling, you are what you are right there and then. People don't have your past to hold against you. No yesterdays on the road.
William Least Heat Moon, Blue Highways

Your toughest competitor lives in your head. Some days his name is fear, or pain, or gravity. Stomp his ass.

HOOKED ON THE WHITE POWDER

THERACONTEUR21

See Its Because People Dont Understand
Thank You For The Comment
Yes You Were Part Right
Methaphor
Its About Religion Like What Gave Us And What We Do With It
Also How Much People Want From Us
And I Used M Word To Spell Check It So I Knowit Has To Be Right

jibber

yes, people don't understand because you don't know how to get your point across in an effective manner.

and once again, I said your SPELLING was right, your GRAMMAR wasn't. spellcheck doesn't check for grammatical errors. just because, i've taken the liberty to put all your GRAMMATICAL errors in bold. I'll ignore the title, because i'm assuming it's a play on words, and you MEANT to write bored, even though BOARD would be more appropriate, as a board is a surface on which it would be possible to write, and bored is an emotion that arises from lack of activity.

"I am about to give up" said the champion
The only reason is I do it for the love
Only reason they want me to do it
Is too keep the cash in their pockets

I started out loving the game
But soon I felt lack of competition
It became do or die to live this role
So I said I am done and crawled in a whole

No debates that end in arguments of belief
Don’t sedate the friend your grief
As I live with others now forgotten champion
The one that gave up and became a thinker

But see I said "when I am in the game I felt no pain"
No one was there I couldn’t see their stare
Money hungry vampires seeking their meal
But I close them out remember I don’t feel

Now listen to the forgotten champion
Find your way just trust in you
The time will come when you will stand up
Be who you are finding something new

__________________
What you've done becomes the judge of what you're going to do -- especially in other people's minds. When you're traveling, you are what you are right there and then. People don't have your past to hold against you. No yesterdays on the road.
William Least Heat Moon, Blue Highways

Your toughest competitor lives in your head. Some days his name is fear, or pain, or gravity. Stomp his ass.

HOOKED ON THE WHITE POWDER

Blain

You spelt Board wrong.

Kthxbai.

A_Perfect_Sonnet

This thread is a waste of the internet.

Strummer521

I think that was an intentional pun.

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TheUsedToolguy

well, you said it was about religion, I can see that. It also made me think about parents, and the unfortunate situation where a lot of parents want their kids to look good, and seem adjusted and professional and competitive, sometimes at the expense of their own child's happiness. For instance, some parents get their young daughter into ice skating at a very young age, 4. She excels at it, and has won a lot of tournaments and stuff, and you might look at her one day, standing up on a platform, accepting her trophy. You see the parents there, and the trophy means nothing to the little girl, but the parents' trophy is the little kid, that they are so proud of, because of how successful she appears to be to the outer world.

Then, in reading the last paragraph, I thought about how at some point in time, we do have to break free from our parents, and forge our own identity, no matter how little your parents understand it, you must be who you are.