Work With Me On This One! (song, hands)

DontRunMeOver · 03-27-2007, 04:58 AM

I'm looking for some lines/inspiration to help me write the main body of a song.

The chorus of the song is cemented as:

"I fell, I fell, you pushed me too hard and I fell"

And I'm planning to make the topic about somebody who is over-pressurised to achieve by their parents, gets stressed out and ends up jumping off a building. If anybody has any good suggestions for lines/themes that could be included then say now and I might incorporate it into my song. Either way, I'll be recording it sometime in the next few weeks with or without your input!

right-track · 03-27-2007, 01:42 PM

I like the idea of a parents over enthusiasm for their child, being their demise.

Ideas about the child being held in the arms of his mother and then, metaphorically speaking ("I fell, I fell, you pushed me too hard and I fell") being killed by those same hands that once provided him/her with so much security...that kind of thing.

03-27-2007, 01:42 PM	#2 (permalink)
right-track Atchin' Akai Join Date: May 2005 Location: Unamerica Posts: 8,770	I like the idea of a parents over enthusiasm for their child, being their demise. Ideas about the child being held in the arms of his mother and then, metaphorically speaking ("I fell, I fell, you pushed me too hard and I fell") being killed by those same hands that once provided him/her with so much security...that kind of thing.