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xemoxyox623 04-18-2007 06:37 PM

emoo
 
ok so a few months ago i got real angry at something. and i wrote this little song and im quite proud of it, if i do say so myself. anyone else's opinions?



We sit and think,
As we wipe dry.
All the tears that we cry.

I'm on the brink,
The edge of insanity.
Wondering what do I see in this vanity?

I lay here burning in my mentality

Cut, stab
Watch them bleed.
You'll not suffer
For this sinful deed.

Put them through their sorrows
For they would grieve in the end
Take the broken from the heart
Try to find a way to mend.

You end the pain,
Break the streak
As they become bleak.

In their vein,
The cold, it begins to pulse.
You watch as they convulse.

It finally hits, the true reality.

Cut, stab
Watch them bleed.
You'll not suffer
For this sinful deed.

Put them through their sorrows
For they would grieve in the end
Take the broken from the heart
Try to find a way to mend.

They're finally dead,
They're bleeding the red.
Enough was said.
As you're tears were shed.

thanks
gitrshredr



sleepy jack 04-18-2007 08:01 PM

I have an idea, it begins with s and ends in uicide.

just for kicks 04-18-2007 08:04 PM

really depressing, wish i hadnt read that

zak 04-18-2007 08:35 PM

I agree, i'm kinda down now. /cuts self

CAPTAIN CAVEMAN 04-18-2007 09:29 PM

"As you're tears were shed."

*your

Kinda weak. Feels cliched.

Ace 04-23-2007 08:49 PM

I could paraphrase that...
"OH EM GEE SOMEONE TOOK MY PARKING PLACE!"
*runs out in a dramatic frenzy*
"THE HORROR!"
*stabs self!*
*peeps to see if anyone is looking >.>*

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes 04-24-2007 08:48 AM

Kinda weak < That's charitable. Here's a word that starts with s and ends in ucks. Have an original thought. Then come back. My friend, "The a--hole" informs me that was an a--hole thing to say. I'm just going to say "I couldn't care less."

Urban Hat€monger ? 04-24-2007 03:15 PM

Why do people always write songs when they are angry.
Can't you just down a load of mescaline & write about that instead?


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