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Old 04-18-2007, 06:37 PM   #1 (permalink)
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ok so a few months ago i got real angry at something. and i wrote this little song and im quite proud of it, if i do say so myself. anyone else's opinions?



We sit and think,
As we wipe dry.
All the tears that we cry.

I'm on the brink,
The edge of insanity.
Wondering what do I see in this vanity?

I lay here burning in my mentality

Cut, stab
Watch them bleed.
You'll not suffer
For this sinful deed.

Put them through their sorrows
For they would grieve in the end
Take the broken from the heart
Try to find a way to mend.

You end the pain,
Break the streak
As they become bleak.

In their vein,
The cold, it begins to pulse.
You watch as they convulse.

It finally hits, the true reality.

Cut, stab
Watch them bleed.
You'll not suffer
For this sinful deed.

Put them through their sorrows
For they would grieve in the end
Take the broken from the heart
Try to find a way to mend.

They're finally dead,
They're bleeding the red.
Enough was said.
As you're tears were shed.

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Old 04-18-2007, 08:01 PM   #2 (permalink)
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I have an idea, it begins with s and ends in uicide.
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Old 04-18-2007, 08:04 PM   #3 (permalink)
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really depressing, wish i hadnt read that
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Old 04-18-2007, 08:35 PM   #4 (permalink)
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I agree, i'm kinda down now. /cuts self
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Old 04-18-2007, 09:29 PM   #5 (permalink)
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"As you're tears were shed."

*your

Kinda weak. Feels cliched.
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Old 04-23-2007, 08:49 PM   #6 (permalink)
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I could paraphrase that...
"OH EM GEE SOMEONE TOOK MY PARKING PLACE!"
*runs out in a dramatic frenzy*
"THE HORROR!"
*stabs self!*
*peeps to see if anyone is looking >.>*
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Old 04-24-2007, 08:48 AM   #7 (permalink)
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Kinda weak < That's charitable. Here's a word that starts with s and ends in ucks. Have an original thought. Then come back. My friend, "The a--hole" informs me that was an a--hole thing to say. I'm just going to say "I couldn't care less."
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Old 04-24-2007, 03:15 PM   #8 (permalink)
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Why do people always write songs when they are angry.
Can't you just down a load of mescaline & write about that instead?
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