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Old 07-30-2007, 11:19 PM   #1 (permalink)
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i just wrote this so its not the best but its something i have done alot better...
well here goes..oh and by the way,it doesn't have a name yet



you me set and size me down and think I am stupid just because I am not like you.
you call me names and play these games I am sick of this sh!t.
its just too funny when you act like children when your suppose to act like men.
you think you so smart but we all know that your not.
your only upset cause you have problems at home so you come on here and take it out on people like me.
you think your better but we all know your not.
you want to be all tough well you can't even say sh!t to my face.
you say that I am Emo and my tears fall down but,
I am a girl who cries her tears for better reasons then you.
yeah you say I cut my myself but there are no wounds, scars, or cut on my body any where.
you say I am always depressed when I am really a very happy person half the time.
You say things when you don't even know the first thing about me.
I have dealt with fighting my whole life and I won't fight with people cause of that very reason I prefer to talk it out more so then anything else.
Call me a p^ssy but if you lived a few weeks in my shoes and acted the same way I do, you would know what its like to live in the life as an EmoPrincess.


thank you i would like to know what you think
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Old 07-31-2007, 09:18 AM   #2 (permalink)
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I can't believe I'm doing this.


[You me set] and size me down and think I am stupid just because I am not like you.
parenthesesis=no sense and this line has no poetic value. Non of this poem has an poetic value.
You call me names and play these games I am sick of this sh!t.
coming right out and saying stuff is boring that's what pros is for. Actually it's not something that you can't do in poetry but sparingly and like every line is literal, dull, silly teenage angsty; lacking good vocabulary, originality or any point worth mentioning.
It's just too funny when you act like children when you're suppose to act like men.
cliche boring and pretty dumb
You think you're so smart but we all know that you're not.
Your only upset cause you have problems at home so you come on here and take it out on people like me.
You think your better but we all know your not.
You want to be all tough well you can't even say sh!t to my face.
You say that I am emo and my tears fall down, but
I am a girl who cries her tears for better reasons then you.
Yeah you say I cut my myself but there are no wounds, scars, or cut on my body any where.
You say I am always depressed when I am really a very happy person half the time.
You say things when you don't even know the first thing about me.
I have dealt with fighting my whole life and I won't fight with people cause of
That very reason I prefer to talk it out more so then anything else.
Call me a p^ssy but if you lived a few weeks in my shoes and acted the same way I do, you would know what its like to live in the life as an EmoPrincess.
You're life isn't that bad bugger the fuck off. If you want someone to take time to read something then take time to write it. This is horrible.
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Old 07-31-2007, 09:20 AM   #3 (permalink)
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well that i put up this thread for good comments and bad atleast your not offtopic

Last edited by <3_BEAUTIFUL_HELL_FAIRY_<3; 07-31-2007 at 09:20 AM. Reason: i am such an idiot i need to slow down and type.
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Old 07-31-2007, 01:31 PM   #4 (permalink)
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I can't take this "poem" seriously. Try re-writing it. Many times.
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