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Old 09-10-2007, 08:46 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Question new to song writting. Feedback please

You say you care but do you dare
You call this love it's so unfair
You raise your hand, I bow my head
I'll fear your love untill I'm dead

You say it's love and protection too
But who is here to protect me from you
I try to see and understand
But I'm just a child against a man

When does the pain end and love begin
When can I live my life
When does the pain end and the love begin
Can you tell me why

I try to run but there's nowhere to go
So I'll be brave and won't let my terror show

You say it's love and protection too
when will someone protect me from you


When does the pain end and love begin
When can I live my life
When does the pain end and the love begin
Can you tell me why
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Old 09-11-2007, 06:15 PM   #2 (permalink)
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love is cliche
feelings are cliche
songwriting is cliche
posting criticms is cliche.
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Old 09-13-2007, 06:16 PM   #3 (permalink)
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That was good! Just a little work and I could see that in a song.
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Old 09-13-2007, 06:18 PM   #4 (permalink)
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love is cliche
feelings are cliche
songwriting is cliche
posting criticms is cliche.
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Old 09-13-2007, 08:16 PM   #5 (permalink)
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