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Old 11-28-2007, 01:51 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default Deidre's Casebook #839

My girlfriend
My girlfriend turned to me
She looked me deep in the eye
And said without irony

"If I died
If I died
If I died tomorrow
If I died before you

Would you have sex with my corpse?
Would you have sex with my corpse?
Would you have sex with my corpse?
You could turn the lights out, of course"

I looked at her
With a tinge of horror
And said "no"
I said "no"

Then she turned away
And crossed her arms
Saying "each day that passes we are closer to dying
Getting old is a lingering death
With each day that passes I am nearing the grave
Does this mean that each day you fancy me less?"

In a bid to console her
I told her
I told her
"As you get older, you'll turn out like your mother
And I think your mother is really foxy
I'd definitely have sex with her"

But that didn't seem to help
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When Pete plays it is 100% live , your music if that's what you call it doesn't sound so good either? so you can't really critercize can you ?
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Old 11-28-2007, 05:12 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Good, but the repetition is really annoying and doesn't add anything, to me. I liked it though.
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