Songs and Daughters
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Erase it. There's no form to it, and I don't really see a story.
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Its about a relationship I was in with a boy while he was dating another girl and how people reacted to me being part of it all and how it affected me. The story is in there, and the form is there. If you read it you'll see that I even said it is a Sonnet.
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I give it a 0.5/10.
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If I recall, you're the one who'd rather have this entire thing turned into one big poetry fest. I'm here for music, and nothing else. I don't like lyrics unless they tell a story, and flow well with music. I'll rate the songs, and I'll leave you to give good marks on the poems.
This one has absolutely no story in it, and if it does, it's one only the author can perceive. To each his own opinion. |
I fail to see a problem with that. I'd rather have something so vague and pretty you can't understand it than something so blunt it looks like it was written by a five year old with no grasp on imagery or metaphors.
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This is coming from the same man who'd usually rip someone a new ass for rhyming. Every last word of this piece of work, rhymes with the last word of the next line. Be consistant, even if it is in judgement. Personally, that doesn't bother me nearly as much, if it's in such a slow pace that it flows nicely. But I see no flow to it, and I'd rate this no different if even you had posted it. But if you like it, then cheers to you. Not my cup of tea.
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Yeah because I find banal lyrics coupled with banal rhyming to be awful.
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I like it too, got an abstract feel to it... I feel like this could be a very psych. lo-fi song in the vein of Low. I don't like the last couplet.
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