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Trauma 12-12-2007 11:13 PM

Haiku
 
You’ve blossomed- known Truth:
“What’s done cannot be undone.”
Seung-Hui Cho, take care.




-Jake V.

Dizzys in the wolf 12-13-2007 01:09 PM

I would never dream of considering him blossomed in any way.

Ace 12-14-2007 06:01 AM

Eh. I've only seen one haiku to ever catch my interest. They just seem too short for me to get into em'.

Trauma 12-17-2007 12:21 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dizzys in the wolf (Post 421867)
I would never dream of considering him blossomed in any way.

"What's done cannot be undone" is a line spoken by Lady Macbeth in Shakespeare's Macbeth.
At the end of the play she commits suicide.
I used "blossomed" to represent suicide and "Truth" to symbolize knowledge of the after life.

Jadix 12-20-2007 12:16 AM

wow. he didnt commit suicide, he committed mass homicide suicide. he was weak so he couldn't handle his situation rationally. I hate dumbass college kids as much as the next guy, but i wouldn't call killing 32 people "blossoming"

Jadix 12-20-2007 12:18 AM

+ points for writing something so offensive though

Trauma 12-23-2007 03:07 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Jadix (Post 423816)
wow. he didnt commit suicide, he committed mass homicide suicide. he was weak so he couldn't handle his situation rationally. I hate dumbass college kids as much as the next guy, but i wouldn't call killing 32 people "blossoming"

I'm not trying to be an asshole and using some random verb (mind you, it takes up three syllables) in the midst of a 17 syllable haiku, that would be unethical.
I'm trying to construct a metaphor, using an allusion to set the tone.
The metaphor is such:
Our lives are flowers.
Our perspectives are always encompassed by the petals.
Once we die, the petals unfold.

Ace 12-23-2007 03:14 AM

I like that one ^ a hell of alot better.

Trauma 12-23-2007 03:28 AM

That explanation,
Or are you trying to be facetious?

Ace 12-23-2007 03:40 AM

The haiku at the bottom of your other post. Petals. That one is quite nice.


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