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Old 12-12-2007, 11:13 PM   #1 (permalink)
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You’ve blossomed- known Truth:
“What’s done cannot be undone.”
Seung-Hui Cho, take care.




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Old 12-13-2007, 01:09 PM   #2 (permalink)
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I would never dream of considering him blossomed in any way.
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Old 12-14-2007, 06:01 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Eh. I've only seen one haiku to ever catch my interest. They just seem too short for me to get into em'.
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Old 12-17-2007, 12:21 AM   #4 (permalink)
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I would never dream of considering him blossomed in any way.
"What's done cannot be undone" is a line spoken by Lady Macbeth in Shakespeare's Macbeth.
At the end of the play she commits suicide.
I used "blossomed" to represent suicide and "Truth" to symbolize knowledge of the after life.
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Old 12-20-2007, 12:16 AM   #5 (permalink)
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wow. he didnt commit suicide, he committed mass homicide suicide. he was weak so he couldn't handle his situation rationally. I hate dumbass college kids as much as the next guy, but i wouldn't call killing 32 people "blossoming"
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Old 12-20-2007, 12:18 AM   #6 (permalink)
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+ points for writing something so offensive though
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Old 12-23-2007, 03:07 AM   #7 (permalink)
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wow. he didnt commit suicide, he committed mass homicide suicide. he was weak so he couldn't handle his situation rationally. I hate dumbass college kids as much as the next guy, but i wouldn't call killing 32 people "blossoming"
I'm not trying to be an asshole and using some random verb (mind you, it takes up three syllables) in the midst of a 17 syllable haiku, that would be unethical.
I'm trying to construct a metaphor, using an allusion to set the tone.
The metaphor is such:
Our lives are flowers.
Our perspectives are always encompassed by the petals.
Once we die, the petals unfold.
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Old 12-23-2007, 03:14 AM   #8 (permalink)
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I like that one ^ a hell of alot better.
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Old 12-23-2007, 03:28 AM   #9 (permalink)
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That explanation,
Or are you trying to be facetious?
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Old 12-23-2007, 03:40 AM   #10 (permalink)
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The haiku at the bottom of your other post. Petals. That one is quite nice.
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