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Old 12-15-2007, 09:43 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Default the treaty of versailles in less than 5 minutes

the treaty of versailles in 5 minutes or less

the sound of my heartbeat numbs my ears with the noise of artillery fire and cluster bombs. planes fly above us tracing curves and drawing patterns in the atmosphere. our names are spelled, our banners are lifted, bilateral agreements are signed. it's a long way to the other side of the room, the path is long and winding. the roads that spill between the teeth and the fingernails are the only roads that lead back home. it takes a while to walk back, but it's the best way to go. home is where the heart is, and my heart is back the way i came. into the trenches again, into the trenches, paco.
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Old 12-15-2007, 09:50 AM   #2 (permalink)
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Its a pretty cool poem! Its a nice concept and it seems like you've tried to put a bit of detail in to the actual character in the last line which is nice.
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Old 12-15-2007, 10:39 AM   #3 (permalink)
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thanks, man.
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Old 12-15-2007, 11:05 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Not a fan of the structure....
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this si boring
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Old 03-05-2013, 01:10 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Cool lol


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