modern gypsy (fan, title, quote, songs, Hang)

ZeppelinAir · 12-18-2007, 01:57 AM

before i continue with it i want some opinion,

Modern Gypsy

Watch her just walk on by, walk on by,
The noose around her neck was too tightly tied,
A modern gypsy without a name, without a name,
The story is always the same

every time you walk on by, walk on by
I always try to stop you to try to tell you hi,
But your simple life would rather have you die, have you die,
But I will always come back to you,

Watch this gypsy just walk on by, walk on by
Each day I ask your name but its always the same,
Never able to say the line, say the line,
Before you run out of time.

TheCaster · 12-18-2007, 07:14 AM

tell you hi, is rather out of pace

seems a bit childish for some reason... but i say continue with it..

ZeppelinAir · 12-18-2007, 01:47 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by TheCaster

tell you hi, is rather out of pace

seems a bit childish for some reason... but i say continue with it..

it doesnt really go with it and i was going to change it when i got the chance

Ace · 12-19-2007, 03:35 AM

What is it supposed to be about?

ZeppelinAir · 12-19-2007, 04:13 PM

about more or less wondering person that was seen ans couldnt get out of the head

~~Gates_of_Iscariot~~ · 12-19-2007, 07:59 PM

wtf is a modern gypsy

Ace · 12-19-2007, 08:32 PM

Hmm....kind of like a mystery woman. I'd reform it, just because I'm not really a fan of the structure. I don't know if I'd stick with the title either....modern doesn't really apply to gypsy, since there's still plenty around. Perhaps something like "Gypsy Woman". But that kind of reminds me of a title from ELO (I think), called "Witchy Woman". It's a good concept. Just try redoing some of it.

~~Gates_of_Iscariot~~ · 12-19-2007, 08:33 PM

i can see the patterns in a million other songs.
spew your mind.
and rearrange it.

12-18-2007, 01:57 AM	#1 (permalink)
ZeppelinAir Long time no see Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: somewhere in Michigan Posts: 512	modern gypsy before i continue with it i want some opinion, Modern Gypsy Watch her just walk on by, walk on by, The noose around her neck was too tightly tied, A modern gypsy without a name, without a name, The story is always the same every time you walk on by, walk on by I always try to stop you to try to tell you hi, But your simple life would rather have you die, have you die, But I will always come back to you, Watch this gypsy just walk on by, walk on by Each day I ask your name but its always the same, Never able to say the line, say the line, Before you run out of time. __________________ not that old signature

12-18-2007, 07:14 AM	#2 (permalink)
TheCaster Music Rapist Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Somewhere in the U.S Posts: 400	tell you hi, is rather out of pace seems a bit childish for some reason... but i say continue with it.. __________________ A soul in tension thats learning to fly Condition grounded but determined to try Cant keep my eyes from the circling skies Tongue-tied and twisted just an earth-bound misfit

12-19-2007, 04:13 PM	#5 (permalink)
ZeppelinAir Long time no see Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: somewhere in Michigan Posts: 512	about more or less wondering person that was seen ans couldnt get out of the head __________________ not that old signature

12-19-2007, 07:59 PM	#6 (permalink)
~~Gates_of_Iscariot~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: new hampshire Posts: 191	wtf is a modern gypsy

12-19-2007, 08:33 PM	#8 (permalink)
~~Gates_of_Iscariot~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: new hampshire Posts: 191	i can see the patterns in a million other songs. spew your mind. and rearrange it.