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Old 03-03-2008, 02:56 PM   #1 (permalink)
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“Crescent”

The moon is shining bright
the cold air twisting silver
the crescent moon is smooth
watch it move like water in a stream

The dark nights shimmer in the light
The bright days twist into the dark
Reflecting from the stars

Slip away
journey through the vast space
and the moon is streaming for you
into the light

Take away
the craters that refold the light
The crescent moon is gleaming
remembering the days before light

The song isn't finished... I was just bored and decided to make a song and didn't finish it. What does everyone think of it?
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Old 03-03-2008, 05:28 PM   #2 (permalink)
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I really like the imagery. :{)
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Old 03-04-2008, 06:43 PM   #3 (permalink)
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It does sound very unfinished...perhaps you should finish it first?
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