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Old 03-17-2008, 07:22 PM   #1 (permalink)
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please read it and tell me what you think or if maybe i should change some things




Verse 1

You know I love it when you smile

To get to you I’d run for miles

I’d do anything to know you love me too

To fall asleep and wake up with you

I’d hold you in my arms at night

Hearts start beating and it feels so right

Chorus

Hold my hand and my heart takes flight

As we lay together on this starry night

Nothing can go wrong

As we hear our song

And we sing along

To all the words we know

Verse 2

When I see you I think you should know

That I would freeze time or make it go slow

Our time together goes way to fast

Memories of you will always last

Wishing that it will never end

You will always be my greatest friend

Chorus

Hold my hand and my heart takes flight

As we lay together on this starry night

Sometimes things go wrong

So we hear our song

And we sing along

To all the words we know

Verse 3

That perfect smile and those pretty eyes

Shine like the stars in the clear night sky

It’s not the walk it’s the way you talk

Because I know that you care

No one else can compare

Closing

Now that it’s over I had to think things through

Even though we had good times I guess im not right for you

I will always be your friend and hold you if you cry

I will always be there for you till the day I die
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Old 03-17-2008, 07:30 PM   #2 (permalink)
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....this looks very familiar
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Old 03-17-2008, 08:02 PM   #3 (permalink)
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its 100% my song completly origonal
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Old 03-18-2008, 07:35 PM   #4 (permalink)
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If you say so.

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Old 03-18-2008, 07:37 PM   #5 (permalink)
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...and a thesaurus*.


*clue: it's not a dinosaur
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Old 03-18-2008, 08:11 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Pwnt!
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