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fighttest89 04-20-2008 05:30 AM

please review
 
lyrics to an as-of-yet-untitled song.

with your tongue free of teeth you'll scream satellites
and swallow a sun that never shines
your eyes swelled to immeasurable size
raining on us it feels
like love
like love
like love

any feedback is appreciated.

hxcveggies 04-20-2008 12:52 PM

What's the tune like?

SRC 04-28-2008 08:26 PM

Good so far... keep writing this!

Whatsitoosit 05-07-2008 09:38 AM

So far it seems like perfect poetry... makes little to no sense and sounds very clever :)

good job.

I would like to hear or read it when it is finished.


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