Music Banter

Go Back   Music Banter > Artists Corner > Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry
Register Blogging Search Today's Posts Mark Forums Read
Welcome to Music Banter Forum! Make sure to register - it's free and very quick! You have to register before you can post and participate in our discussions with over 70,000 other registered members. After you create your free account, you will be able to customize many options, you will have the full access to over 1,100,000 posts.

Reply
 
Thread Tools Display Modes
Old 07-07-2008, 12:27 AM   #1 (permalink)
Groupie
 
Join Date: Jul 2008
Location: Everywhere
Posts: 4
Default Trainstation at the Stream

Hello everyone!
I'm new to the forums. Please, be gentle.

This one was a stream of consciousness of sorts, each stanza being a separate idea until I decided to connect them all.

The title is the name of the thread, just so you know. Guess what it's a play on. I dare you.

"Show the moment through how you perceived.
(It's a lot easier when the sun's not blinding.)

"I fell for your charm
without realizing
my prior mistakes.
Maybe that's why your the first
and the one to ask.

Never start late
you'll miss out
you'll lose time
chances will be lost
Don't hide
Don't seek
Don't play idle"

What if the umbilical cord
was never really cut?
What if we were all still
maternally connected?
Back Alley Orthodontist is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 07-08-2008, 11:24 AM   #2 (permalink)
Groupie
 
angel_from_your_nightmare's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jun 2008
Location: Toronto, Canada
Posts: 13
Default

I'm having a hard time connecting them myself although it does have a vague thread running through it all. Care to offer any more explanation of it?
angel_from_your_nightmare is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 07-08-2008, 07:52 PM   #3 (permalink)
Groupie
 
Join Date: Jul 2008
Location: Everywhere
Posts: 4
Default

Quote:
Originally Posted by angel_from_your_nightmare View Post
I'm having a hard time connecting them myself although it does have a vague thread running through it all. Care to offer any more explanation of it?
Stanza 1: It's much easier to tell a story when there's nothing keeping the speaker from lying.

Stanza 2: Blah Blah, something about relationships, etcetera.

Stanza 3: A warning to not wait for something to happen, and the consequences when action is finally taken.

Stanza 4: What if everyone was related in some weird way? Why be so nervous if we're the same?

(Stanzas 2, 3, and 4 could have been grouped, they're from one point of view. Stanza 1 is the other (obviously).)
Back Alley Orthodontist is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 07-09-2008, 10:53 PM   #4 (permalink)
sleepe
 
Double X's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jun 2008
Location: boston
Posts: 1,140
Default

I don't get it. Are they supposed to be separate songs? They have all different directions. Try making songs out of all of them.

I can't feel the melody in the stanzas, but if their is one, I bet they could fit together.
Double X is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 07-12-2008, 09:00 PM   #5 (permalink)
Groupie
 
Join Date: Jul 2008
Posts: 1
Default

"what if" statements are so last year.
pilgrimly is offline   Reply With Quote
Reply

Thread Tools
Display Modes

Similar Threads



© 2003-2019 Advameg, Inc.