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Old 07-17-2008, 12:09 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default What Do You Think Of These Lyrics?

The city lights
(As they pass by)
The writing on the walls pictures of this all

I know now what you think of me
(Thinking now you never told me)
I know now what you think of me
(Thinking now you never told me)

The way you walk
Compliments the way you talk
And it looks so good
(It looks so good)
Slip off your fingertips
I taste him on your lips like I know you would
(I know you would)

And I regret
(The things I've said)
But it doesn't matter anyways

I know now what you think of me
(Thinking now you never told me)
I know now what you think of me
(Thinking now you never told me)

The way you walk
Compliments the way you talk
And it looks so good
(It looks so good)
Slip off your fingertips
I taste him on your lips like I know you would
(I know you would)

I know now what you think of me
I know now what you think of me
I know now what you think of me
(Thinking now you never told me)

The way you walk
Compliments the way you talk
And it looks so good
(It looks so good)
Slip off your fingertips
I taste him on your lips like I know you would
(I know you would)
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Old 07-17-2008, 05:58 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Old 07-18-2008, 12:03 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Songs without verses tend to get boring quickly.
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Old 08-15-2008, 07:05 AM   #4 (permalink)
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I would reconsider you're structure, your themes, your choice of words and phrasing...in short most everything. Reading some good poetry may be good.
no offence...its a subjective art
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Old 08-23-2008, 09:05 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Honestly, I just skimmed through, because I got bored. :/

I agree with FireInCairo.
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Old 08-23-2008, 09:45 PM   #6 (permalink)
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people will always be critical and usually they're correct, it's more about delivery in terms of lyrics.
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Old 04-12-2009, 01:35 AM   #7 (permalink)
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"I know now what you think of me"( and you say it three times in a row in your song.) (thinking now you never told me) With all that, I'm thinking and wondering? What is that you know and what did she say about you? What DOES she thinks of you, were you wonderful or bad? This could be the best part. lol. ( what she thinks of you?)
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Old 04-18-2009, 01:39 PM   #8 (permalink)
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Not a bad start, you should add some verses.
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