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Old 12-16-2008, 10:47 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Im sorry for the pain
And for broken promises
Im sorry for the way I let you down

But you're ****ing up my life
And ****ing up my mind
So just forget bout how we felt or how we feel

You've been a bad one, yes you have
And before we both are dead
Please just get all thought of me out of your head

And now you're off to save the world
But you cant, cause your worlds broken
So just get all thoughts of me out of your head

So run away. run away from your heart tonight, Just run away, run for your life
Just run away, run away it'll be alright, just run away, run away tonight

Im sorry for the past
And Im sorry for the future
But the present aint lookin so good

But you're ****ing up my life
And ****ing up my mind
So just forget bout how we felt or how we feel

You've been a bad one, yes you have
And before we both are dead
Please just get all thought of me out of your head

And now you're off to save the world
But you cant, cause your worlds broken
So just get all thoughts of me out of your head

So run away. run away from your heart tonight, Just run away, run for your life
Just run away, run away it'll be alright, just run away, run away tonight
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Old 12-16-2008, 12:39 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Okay. I'm going to be harsh. Because I'm in a bad mood. This is too cliche for my liking... it's repetitive, in a bad way. And the rhyming is mediocre. I just think it's stupid.
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Old 12-17-2008, 07:06 PM   #3 (permalink)
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This is way too cliche.
But hey, if "I Don't Care" or whatever by Apocalyptica can get air time on the radio, why not?
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Old 12-25-2008, 10:18 PM   #4 (permalink)
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it reads more like a letter than lyrics -- i understand what you are trying to do but maybe try to use more unique imagery rather than standard themes/ 'run away' has been used so so many times in songs - makes me think of the Bon Jovi tune and that may not be a good thing LOL
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