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Old 01-04-2009, 07:54 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default So Many Scars

This is a song I wrote a long time ago but have since transformed into a poem.

So Many Scars
Hurtful memories,
Bringing back her mind games.
Slits upon his wrist,
A reminder, he'll never be the same.
Pictures of her,
Thrown on the floor with broken frames.
Holes in the wall,
The remains of his fists of rage.

"Forgive and Forget,"
Is never of any use.
Cause how could he,
Forgive all of her abuse.
And how could he,
Forget all the things they went through

Any criticism/response is appreciated.
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Old 01-06-2009, 04:35 PM   #2 (permalink)
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That's really good! I love it!
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Old 01-12-2009, 08:11 PM   #3 (permalink)
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And you were writing about yourself or someone else?
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Old 01-13-2009, 01:17 PM   #4 (permalink)
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someone else... a subconscious-esque character in my mind
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Old 01-13-2009, 04:13 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Well done.
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Old 01-15-2009, 07:39 PM   #6 (permalink)
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DYSFUNCTIONAL : awesome literary tantrum. Must've been a pretty crappy fight for whoever it is about.
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