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Old 02-20-2009, 12:05 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default Some recent Poetry

Poetry Iv'e written in the past couple weeks, looking for some feedback... so tell me what you think.
Edit: Okay, so, I'm really curious as to not only what people think of these as far as liking them, but what they are taking from them. Some interpretation would be nice, it would really help me know how well I'm getting things across. You don't have to do all three, just pick one, If it isn't too much to ask!

Poem#1
Problems in Pictures

Her playgrounds in ruins
Pictures she can't touch
Take her from the world
They leave her divided
From me and everything
Her minds an analgesic
If I could hear her scream,
or cry, or vividly recall
Maybe she could see
There's no problem here at all

Poem#2
Visable Light

Iris knows my face
Photons bring flowers to
Her hospital towers for
Cornea to hold in place

Scared sick, petrified hands
unwilling to see me or grace
In Cornea her flowers encased
She believes this to be safe

Only lies infect her sight
Truth is finding yourself

Poem #3
Hysterical blindness

My mother's anomaly
Father, my poor host
Searching for aimlessly
My permanet death

Iv'e Inherited Grandma
She ferments me
and She refuses
Fathers insensible will

Unnumberable,
His Head-shrinkers,
His anti-biotics,
His snorted sunlight,
They embrace me

Cannot kill me,
Cannot cure me
You are not normal
You need me, Father

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Old 02-21-2009, 11:19 AM   #2 (permalink)
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your way of looking at the world is interestiong
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