song for my lost love (show)

tymygy · 04-18-2009, 11:14 PM

day by day I wonder if the path I choose is the one to take.
and I look up to the almost never ending stars and see how real you are.
I cant tell you how hard it is to say those 3 words to your face.
but Ill find my place under your wings for all eternity.

I'm alone.
but Ill reach for you, Ill reach for you.
Ill show the world what we can be.
I am lost.
but Ill reach for you, Ill never let go.
Ill show the world what they should see.

my heart sank into my stomach when you said you loved him.
I wont hint at my love to anyone, not even the wind.
I dont want to love you, but Ill always try to capture your love.
but Ill find my place under your wings for all eternity.

I'm alone.
but Ill reach for you, Ill reach for you.
Ill show the world what we can be.
I am lost.
but Ill reach for you, Ill never let go.
Ill show the world what they should see.

I wont die without you in my arms.
I wont live without your warmth.
so Ill take the part of me.
that feels so empty.
I wont die without you in my arms.
I wont live without your warmth.
so Ill take the part of me.
that feels so empty.
I wont die without you in my arms.
I wont live without your warmth.
so Ill take the part of me.
that feels so empty.
I wont die without you in my arms.
I wont live without your warmth.
so Ill take the part of me.
that feels so empty.

tymygy · 04-18-2009, 11:29 PM

constructive criticism would be appriciated

Naked · 04-19-2009, 01:33 AM

COME BACK TO ME IT'S ALMOST EASY
Sorry, couldn't resist...
Try thinking of different ways to say things, lines that play off of cliches like "whisper to the wind" are almost never good, although that depends on your standards I guess.

tymygy · 04-19-2009, 02:23 PM

yeah their my own

and A7X is amazing :P

and what I ment by that was I wont speak of my love even to myself.

idk what to put in place of that so :/

~~TumorAttitude~~ · 04-25-2009, 08:22 PM

Its a bit generic.....but you probably ment what you wrote, just write in moments where you feel the emotion flooding out of you, then revise it later.

God, I totally don't know what I'm talking about. Just write what you feel like, its only as good as you think it is.

04-18-2009, 11:14 PM	#1 (permalink)
tymygy Groupie Join Date: Apr 2009 Posts: 13	song for my lost love day by day I wonder if the path I choose is the one to take. and I look up to the almost never ending stars and see how real you are. I cant tell you how hard it is to say those 3 words to your face. but Ill find my place under your wings for all eternity. I'm alone. but Ill reach for you, Ill reach for you. Ill show the world what we can be. I am lost. but Ill reach for you, Ill never let go. Ill show the world what they should see. my heart sank into my stomach when you said you loved him. I wont hint at my love to anyone, not even the wind. I dont want to love you, but Ill always try to capture your love. but Ill find my place under your wings for all eternity. I'm alone. but Ill reach for you, Ill reach for you. Ill show the world what we can be. I am lost. but Ill reach for you, Ill never let go. Ill show the world what they should see. I wont die without you in my arms. I wont live without your warmth. so Ill take the part of me. that feels so empty. I wont die without you in my arms. I wont live without your warmth. so Ill take the part of me. that feels so empty. I wont die without you in my arms. I wont live without your warmth. so Ill take the part of me. that feels so empty. I wont die without you in my arms. I wont live without your warmth. so Ill take the part of me. that feels so empty.

04-18-2009, 11:29 PM	#2 (permalink)
tymygy Groupie Join Date: Apr 2009 Posts: 13	constructive criticism would be appriciated Last edited by tymygy; 04-18-2009 at 11:39 PM.

04-19-2009, 01:33 AM	#3 (permalink)
Naked Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Posts: 48	COME BACK TO ME IT'S ALMOST EASY Sorry, couldn't resist... Try thinking of different ways to say things, lines that play off of cliches like "whisper to the wind" are almost never good, although that depends on your standards I guess.

04-19-2009, 02:23 PM	#4 (permalink)
tymygy Groupie Join Date: Apr 2009 Posts: 13	yeah their my own and A7X is amazing :P and what I ment by that was I wont speak of my love even to myself. idk what to put in place of that so :/

04-25-2009, 08:22 PM	#5 (permalink)
~~TumorAttitude~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Dec 2008 Location: Purgatory Posts: 749	Its a bit generic.....but you probably ment what you wrote, just write in moments where you feel the emotion flooding out of you, then revise it later. God, I totally don't know what I'm talking about. Just write what you feel like, its only as good as you think it is.