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Old 04-18-2009, 11:14 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default song for my lost love

day by day I wonder if the path I choose is the one to take.
and I look up to the almost never ending stars and see how real you are.
I cant tell you how hard it is to say those 3 words to your face.
but Ill find my place under your wings for all eternity.

I'm alone.
but Ill reach for you, Ill reach for you.
Ill show the world what we can be.
I am lost.
but Ill reach for you, Ill never let go.
Ill show the world what they should see.

my heart sank into my stomach when you said you loved him.
I wont hint at my love to anyone, not even the wind.
I dont want to love you, but Ill always try to capture your love.
but Ill find my place under your wings for all eternity.

I'm alone.
but Ill reach for you, Ill reach for you.
Ill show the world what we can be.
I am lost.
but Ill reach for you, Ill never let go.
Ill show the world what they should see.

I wont die without you in my arms.
I wont live without your warmth.
so Ill take the part of me.
that feels so empty.
I wont die without you in my arms.
I wont live without your warmth.
so Ill take the part of me.
that feels so empty.
I wont die without you in my arms.
I wont live without your warmth.
so Ill take the part of me.
that feels so empty.
I wont die without you in my arms.
I wont live without your warmth.
so Ill take the part of me.
that feels so empty.
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Old 04-18-2009, 11:29 PM   #2 (permalink)
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constructive criticism would be appriciated

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Old 04-19-2009, 01:33 AM   #3 (permalink)
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COME BACK TO ME IT'S ALMOST EASY
Sorry, couldn't resist...
Try thinking of different ways to say things, lines that play off of cliches like "whisper to the wind" are almost never good, although that depends on your standards I guess.
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Old 04-19-2009, 02:23 PM   #4 (permalink)
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yeah their my own

and A7X is amazing :P

and what I ment by that was I wont speak of my love even to myself.

idk what to put in place of that so :/
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Old 04-25-2009, 08:22 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Its a bit generic.....but you probably ment what you wrote, just write in moments where you feel the emotion flooding out of you, then revise it later.

God, I totally don't know what I'm talking about. Just write what you feel like, its only as good as you think it is.
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