The Cricket Collector
Well I'm so sorry I'm rude, I'm sorry I just assume,
What did you expect when my feet's soaking wet, and my floormat turned out maroon Oh such a fitting excuse, I'm not so much better, maybe I just popped a fuse. My memory serves me things you've forgotten, you've seen, but that doesn't change the fact that it's still what it seems. Well carry on with your nap time, there is close to no hurry tonight It's not your fingers I feel, running cold down down through my spine Still I've got to admit to you, never realized you thought this through Your lysergic scheme was never as good as it seemed, color me impressed, it's better than I had dreamed. Well carry on with your nap time, there is close to no hurry tonight It's not your fingers I feel, running cold down down through my spine |
Wow, that's an interesting take on song writing. A couple of things need to be cleaned up, but other than that, the concept is pretty refreshing. I guess you expect a few critiques from me?
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peace out, -nick |
thanks :D
i thought no one was going to reply so i edited my post like a moron, and than someone replied lol so i edited back but got lazy and didn't write the bit about english not being my first language :P anyways, thanks :D thanks for the critiques :) unfortunately most of the changes can't be made since it would mess the singing melody, and also, the song's already recorded hehe :P i'm glad you liked the metaphor :D |
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