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Old 07-23-2009, 12:59 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Default Under The Hole

You could never guess what was down there under the hole.
I went under and found out myself.

Under the hole is a world that you canít believe
Itís a world full of evil
A world full of magic
A world full of hate

You could never guess what was down there under the hole.
You could never guess what was down there under the hole.
You could never guess what was down there under the hole.


The fall was long.
The fall was painful.
The fall brought me to an amazing world.

Giant trolls
Dark wizards
Little gnomes
Castles made of bones
Darker then the eyes of the Devil
All down under the hole

The underworld is planning to revolt against us
The underworld is planning to revolt against us
The underworld is planning to revolt against us
The underworld is planning to revolt against us

They have their magic and we have our bullets
They have their magic and we have our bullets

They will win and we will die
Itís about time.

They want to see the Sun
And they want to us to go down

You could never guess what was down there under the hole.
You could never guess what was down there under the hole.
You could never guess what was down there under the hole.


I'm still thinking of adding more stuff. This is a metal-ish song with distortion guitar and bass. Any comments will be appreciated.
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Old 07-23-2009, 12:30 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Ahhh...develop it more, I think.
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Old 07-23-2009, 12:31 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Giant trolls
Dark wizards
Little gnomes
Castles made of bones
I like that bit!
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Old 07-23-2009, 01:32 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Ahhh...develop it more, I think.
yeah i know, but i have kind of a mental block on the song lol
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Old 07-24-2009, 02:45 AM   #5 (permalink)
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lol any other opinions/suggestions?
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Old 07-27-2009, 04:41 PM   #6 (permalink)
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It's pretty cliche. Would work in a Lightning Bolt song or with a parody metal band like Tenacious D. Interesting concept though.
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Old 07-27-2009, 05:16 PM   #7 (permalink)
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lol any other opinions/suggestions?
Stop!
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