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kouki 10-12-2009 07:00 PM

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Originally Posted by AwwSugar (Post 751350)
Yeah, I play a couple. Do you? xD

El guitarro,I think im safe to say Im almost intermediate.

Arya Stark 10-12-2009 07:06 PM

That's cool. ^_^ Do you write to music, then?

kouki 10-12-2009 07:13 PM

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Originally Posted by AwwSugar (Post 751366)
That's cool. ^_^ Do you write to music, then?

Not really,I'll noodle around a few chords or some notes here and there.When I come up with something I like I draw out a tab and the notes or chords. I havent really put music with words yet.

Arya Stark 10-13-2009 01:34 PM

Try it. [= Show us what you get.

asshat 10-17-2009 10:28 PM

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Originally Posted by kouki (Post 745846)
A little background on this,I live in a bad area.This is all sh*t that ive seen and heard yada yada yada.I was thinking of changin the chorus,it seems kinda bitc*y and whiny,let me know.

Ps. Ill be moving out of this sh*t hole soon.Hopefully LOL

I woke up from my dream and into this nightmare
by the shots fired and the sound of screeching tires.
Dreams? We've all got em.
Mine just seem lost and forgotten.

I want out I want out
f*ck surviving and living without <--chorus,i guess
peace of mind peace of mind
It feels imposible to find.

Life in the beat down *****y part of town
candles and flowers lying on the ground
a place I call the land of the lost
surviving a hail of bullets,but at what cost?
living in a world where there is no change
children and mothers are going insane.

What the hell, did they kill someone else?
I guess lead in your diet is not good for your health.
Death here, death where?
Nobody saw a thing. (<--sarcastic)
Once found and not blind but they just cant see.


The positive is that it seems really random--which means I get the impression that you actually feel what your writing....at the same time it's hard to make anything out of it and it feels like more of a rant than poetry or lyrics. The only way I could make any kind of judgement is if I actually heard you sing it, because conviction goes a hell of a long way.

...also "I guess lead in your diet is not good for your health" seems really awkward.

kouki 10-18-2009 07:45 AM

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Originally Posted by asshat (Post 754224)
The positive is that it seems really random--which means I get the impression that you actually feel what your writing....at the same time it's hard to make anything out of it and it feels like more of a rant than poetry or lyrics. The only way I could make any kind of judgement is if I actually heard you sing it, because conviction goes a hell of a long way.

...also "I guess lead in your diet is not good for your health" seems really awkward.

Thanks for the input man.I guess you can call it a rant too LOL.Why does the "lead in your diet" part seem awkward? I wrote it kinda jokingly,I have a sick mind LOL.Ive heard too much of stuff is bad,such as to much fiber,iron,protein.In this case the guy had to much "lead" aka bullets.The story behind this is I was driving from work to my house and the cops barricaded the avenue that gets me to home.When I saw that I automatically thought f*ck did they kill someone again? (Because the week before that they had killed a guy not even a block away)Turns out tho that it wasnt a dude that was shot,but a lady that was trying to cross the ave and some dumb a** ran her and the kids over.That shi* got me so pissed.I didnt change the words on my "poem" tho because its the mentality of living here.You automatically think violence or someone was shot.The song or poem(or rant LOL) doesnt have a climax to "I made it,im out! " because im still here. I wanted to show the mentality and the desperation of living here,kind of a story of surviving in the jungle.

Oops, sorry that im rambling on,hopefully it cleared up some stuff.Again,thanks for the input.I might change some things around later on,im too lazy right now tho.LOL

kouki 10-24-2009 01:20 PM

Got a garfield quickie!

Sleeping or atleast trying to
youre on the couch
I'm here writing things I feel towards you
you blow my mind,in the bad way
though I must admit
youve blown it in the good way every now and then.

likuidcoka 10-28-2009 03:11 PM

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Originally Posted by kouki (Post 751176)
Dont be sorry,we're cool now.Its kinda a good thing,its fueled my creativity level a lot.Most of my stuff is in spanish,I just started writing in english a few weeks ago.Ill be getting better little by little ,hopefully.

I wanna see your spanish stuff!
I like everything so far.

I prefer DIrty whore, Thank you.

:laughing:

kouki 10-31-2009 10:55 AM

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Originally Posted by likuidcoka (Post 759603)

I prefer DIrty whore, Thank you.

:laughing:

Hahaha,thats what I call all my friends.Instead of the "whats up man" Ill be all "sup whore" or skankers,when im feeling frisky I call them "baby girl" LMAO.(not lying)

likuidcoka 10-31-2009 12:36 PM

i believe you.
My man calls his homies "bitches" "jotos" and "dogs" "perro" lmao

I call my girl friends "bishes" a term of endearment jeje


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